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Message de amandinecai posté le 26-10-2015 à 11:52:01 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
Afin de m’entraîner, j'ai fait cette petite rédaction sur la cuisine. Pouvez vous m'aider à corriger les erreurssvp s'il vous plait ?
Voici le sujet: Nowadays, food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improved the way people live? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
REDACTION:
The cook has changed a lot since the beginning of 20th century. This evolution is caused by technological and economical advances, the modification of the function of women in households (=au sein des foyers) and the globalization.
Indeed, noweday almost each household pocesses an electrical oven, a fridge or a microwave. These inventions make possible an easier quicker cook (= une cuisine plus facile et plus rapide) and a longer preservation of aliments.
Today we can preserve food sometimes until several months. Before people gradually (= petit à petit) had to shopping (=devaient faire les courses).
With the women’s works about the 40’s, the fastness of the cook became a necessity for many. Today there are many women whom work, so they don’t have much time to waste. For this reason fast foods have increased, and with them the junk food (=la malbouffe) and obeseness related deseases. (=maladies liées à l’obesité)
In France starvations have disapeared to new deseases. Fortunately, our country is enough saved (=epargné) in comparison with others occidental countries for instance like the USA.
Since the end of the second war, we have got a huge economic progress. From now on (=dorenavant) the families can buy a more various ingredient than before. The most people can buy vegetables to do equilibrated meals which unfortunately often need more time to cook (=qui necessitent souvent plus de temps pour etre cuisinés). For help housewife, some company has created new cookrobots which can warm and chop and shed and mix and do almost everthing. So today it’s possible to cook quickly and easily and healthy while working.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 26-10-2015 19:24
Message de amandinecai posté le 26-10-2015 à 11:52:01 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
Afin de m’entraîner, j'ai fait cette petite rédaction sur la cuisine. Pouvez vous m'aider à corriger les erreurs
Voici le sujet: Nowadays, food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improved the way people live? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
REDACTION:
The cook has changed a lot since the beginning of 20th century. This evolution is caused by technological and economical advances, the modification of the function of women in households (=au sein des foyers) and the globalization.
Indeed, noweday almost each household pocesses an electrical oven, a fridge or a microwave. These inventions make possible an easier quicker cook (= une cuisine plus facile et plus rapide) and a longer preservation of aliments.
Today we can preserve food sometimes until several months. Before people gradually (= petit à petit) had to shopping (=devaient faire les courses).
With the women’s works about the 40’s, the fastness of the cook became a necessity for many. Today there are many women whom work, so they don’t have much time to waste. For this reason fast foods have increased, and with them the junk food (=la malbouffe) and obeseness related deseases. (=maladies liées à l’obesité)
In France starvations have disapeared to new deseases. Fortunately, our country is enough saved (=epargné) in comparison with others occidental countries for instance like the USA.
Since the end of the second war, we have got a huge economic progress. From now on (=dorenavant) the families can buy a more various ingredient than before. The most people can buy vegetables to do equilibrated meals which unfortunately often need more time to cook (=qui necessitent souvent plus de temps pour etre cuisinés). For help housewife, some company has created new cookrobots which can warm and chop and shed and mix and do almost everthing. So today it’s possible to cook quickly and easily and healthy while working.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 26-10-2015 19:24
Réponse: Correction/cuisine de gerondif, postée le 26-10-2015 à 16:55:02 (S | E)
Hello,
un début:
a cook: un cuisinier (l'être humain)
a cooker: une cuisinière (avec son four, le meuble en fer)
the kitchen: la cuisine (la pièce avec ses murs)
The cooking: la cuisine, l'art de faire cuire les aliments.
erreurs en bleu, corrections en vert:
The cook has changed a lot since the beginning of 20th century. This evolution is caused by technological and economical advances, the modification of the function of women in households (=au sein des foyers) and the globalization.
Indeed, noweday almost each household pocesses an electrical oven, a fridge or a microwave oven. These inventions make possible an easier quicker cook (= une cuisine plus facile et plus rapide) and a longer preservation of aliments.
Today we can preserve food sometimes until(pendant, pas depuis) several months. Before people gradually (= petit à petit) had to go shopping (=devaient faire les courses).
With the women’s works(= les travaux et non pas les emplois les métiers) about the 40’s, the fastness of the cook became a necessity for many. Today there are many women whom work, so they don’t have much time to waste. For this reason fast foods have increased, and with them
In France starvations have disapeared to new deseases. Fortunately, our country is enough saved (=epargné) in comparison with others occidental countries for instance
Since the end of the second world war, we have got a huge economic progress. From now on /nowadays(de nos jours) (=dorenavant) the families can buy a more various (varied) ingredient(pluriel) than before. The most people can buy vegetables to do equilibrated meals which unfortunately often need more time to cook (=qui necessitent souvent plus de temps pour etre cuisinés). *For help housewife(pluriel), some company(pluriel) has created new cooking robots which can warm and chop and shed and mix and do almost everthing. So today it’s possible to cook quickly and easily and healthy(est un adjectif, il faut le transformer en adverbe while working.
* traduction de "pour"
for + nom: this present is for you, for my sister.
to + verbe = but: I am here to help you
for + ing = cause: He was arrested for shoplifting.
Réponse: Correction/cuisine de amandinecai, postée le 27-10-2015 à 10:03:59 (S | E)
Bonjour,
Merci beaucoup pour ton aide gerondif!
J'ai procédé aux corrections, j'ai un doute sur une chose ou deux. Serait-il possible de me dire si mon texte est dorénavant tout juste
The cooking has changed a lot since the beginning of 20th century. This evolution is caused by technological and economical advances, the modification of the function of women in households and globalization.
Indeed, nowaday almost each household possesses an electrical oven, a fridge or a microwave oven. These inventions make possible an easier quicker cooking and a longer preservation of aliments.
Today we can preserve food sometimes for several months. Before people gradually had to go shopping.
With the women’s profession about the 40’s, the fastness of the cooking became a necessity for many. Today there are many women who work, so they don’t have much time to waste. For this reason fast foods have increased, and with them junk food and obesity related deseases.
In France starvation has disappeared for new deseases. Fortunately, our country is relatively spared in comparison with others occidental countries for instance the USA.
Since the end of the second world war, we have got huge economic progress. Nowadays families can buy more varied ingredients than before. Most people can buy vegetables to do balanced meals which unfortunately often need more time to cook. To help housewifes, some companies have created new cooking robots which can warm and chop and shed and mix and do almost everthing. So today it’s possible to cook quickly and easily and healthily while working.
Réponse: Correction/cuisine de bluestar, postée le 27-10-2015 à 10:55:22 (S | E)
Bonjour..
Indeed, nowadays almost each every household possesses an electrical oven, a fridge or a microwave oven. These inventions make possible
had to go shopping.With the women’s profession about the 40’s (je dirais 'with women entering the workforce'), the fastness speed of
In France starvation has disappeared for new deseases. Fortunately, our country is relatively spared in comparison with others (pas s au pluriel des adjectifs) occidental ('western' est plus simple) countries, for instance the USA.
Since the end of the second world war, we have got had huge economic progress. Nowadays families can buy more varied ingredients than before. Most people can buy vegetables to do balanced meals which unfortunately often need more time to cook. To help housewifes housewives , some companies have created new cooking robots which can warm and chop and shed (shred?) and mix and do almost everything. So today it’s possible to cook quickly and easily and healthily while working.
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