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Message de bishem91 posté le 08-03-2016 à 21:26:50 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
Pouvez-vous corriger ce texte le plus rapidement possiblesvp s'il vous plait?
Merci d'avance pour vos réponses.
Le sujet étant: Vous êtes un journaliste envoyé en Inde. Présentez un reportage radio sur certains aspects (au choix ici la position de la femme)
Rouge = Toi
Vert = Moi
Hello everybody I’m going to do a little report about a topical subject in any society: the equality between men and women. This report will concern more particularly the evolution of the status of the woman in India.
Intro : In days of today the woman in India has a very fragile social position. The condition of the women is very variable according to time(period), classify her(it) social, religions but also the state, the region, the city or the campaign(countryside). In traditional India the woman is considered as lower than the man they belong at first to their father then to their husband. Men and, in particular the father or the elder son of the family, hold the moral and economic authority.
Even nowadays the man passes transmits the name of his lineage through his sons and inherits the family fortune : he is the undisputed chief of the family.
We are now going to listen to our guest Akila MANSON schoolteacher for 10 years in India which is going to announce us its opinion on the status of the Indian woman.
Hello.
I want to say that it has always been a pride to get a son in India. The birth of a son is particularly favored because they keep the name of the father, inherits the family heritage like you say and they are authorized to do the Hindus funeral rites and this is prohibited to the girls. So when they have a girl it’s jugged like a needless thing. A last thing because of they are not desire is that for her marriage they were obliged to pay the costs and offer to the family of them future in-laws an expensive dowry that obliged them to economized all them life.
I want to talk about the girls education. The weak social position of the girls have generally been a brake to them education.
Educate the girls is traditionally considered as an useless expense because they are going to live in another family when they were married.
But they are lots of others factors that they prevent the school entry of the girls like the social inequalities (two thirds of the non-educate girls come by disadvantaged communities like lowers castes) or their utility to domestic tasks. Their school career was also shorter than the boys.
Yes and in within total population, the pourcentage of literate women stay also under the men: about 65% in 2011, against 82% for the mens.
So despite progress in the last decades and when we compare to the evolution of the others countries, India stay one of the country where desire for change the woman conditions is not enough widespread in the population for a radical change but I hope that will happen!
So it was Kate Harrison here journalist for the NHBC radio.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 08-03-2016 21:30
Message de bishem91 posté le 08-03-2016 à 21:26:50 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
Pouvez-vous corriger ce texte le plus rapidement possible
Merci d'avance pour vos réponses.
Le sujet étant: Vous êtes un journaliste envoyé en Inde. Présentez un reportage radio sur certains aspects (au choix ici la position de la femme)
Rouge = Toi
Vert = Moi
Hello everybody I’m going to do a little report about a topical subject in any society: the equality between men and women. This report will concern more particularly the evolution of the status of the woman in India.
Intro : In days of today the woman in India has a very fragile social position. The condition of the women is very variable according to time(period), classify her(it) social, religions but also the state, the region, the city or the campaign(countryside). In traditional India the woman is considered as lower than the man they belong at first to their father then to their husband. Men and, in particular the father or the elder son of the family, hold the moral and economic authority.
Even nowadays the man passes transmits the name of his lineage through his sons and inherits the family fortune : he is the undisputed chief of the family.
We are now going to listen to our guest Akila MANSON schoolteacher for 10 years in India which is going to announce us its opinion on the status of the Indian woman.
Hello.
I want to say that it has always been a pride to get a son in India. The birth of a son is particularly favored because they keep the name of the father, inherits the family heritage like you say and they are authorized to do the Hindus funeral rites and this is prohibited to the girls. So when they have a girl it’s jugged like a needless thing. A last thing because of they are not desire is that for her marriage they were obliged to pay the costs and offer to the family of them future in-laws an expensive dowry that obliged them to economized all them life.
I want to talk about the girls education. The weak social position of the girls have generally been a brake to them education.
Educate the girls is traditionally considered as an useless expense because they are going to live in another family when they were married.
But they are lots of others factors that they prevent the school entry of the girls like the social inequalities (two thirds of the non-educate girls come by disadvantaged communities like lowers castes) or their utility to domestic tasks. Their school career was also shorter than the boys.
Yes and in within total population, the pourcentage of literate women stay also under the men: about 65% in 2011, against 82% for the mens.
So despite progress in the last decades and when we compare to the evolution of the others countries, India stay one of the country where desire for change the woman conditions is not enough widespread in the population for a radical change but I hope that will happen!
So it was Kate Harrison here journalist for the NHBC radio.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 08-03-2016 21:30
Réponse: Reportage/ Radio de laure95, postée le 09-03-2016 à 11:55:44 (S | E)
Bonjour,
Intro : In days of today (ça ne veut rien dire)
- The condition of the (pas d'article) women
- classify her(it) social, religions: ?
- the campaign (ce nmot ne veut pas dire la campagne / ville)(countryside: OUI).
- In traditional India the woman is considered as lower than the man they (utiliser le pronom singulier)belong (verbe au singulier) at (pas la bonne préposition) first to their (singulier)father then to their (singulier)husband.
- Even nowadays the man passes transmits: pas 2 verbes!
- We are now going to listen to our guest Akila MANSON schoolteacher for 10 years in India which (pas le bon relatif) is going to announce us its opinion on the status of the Indian woman.
Hello.
- The birth of a son is particularly favored because they (singulier) keep (singulier)the name of the father, inherits the family heritage like you say (passé)
- A last thing because of they are not desire is that: mal dit.
- the family of them (ce n'est pas un possessif) future in-laws an expensive dowry that obliged them to economized (TO + INFINITIF) all them (ce n'est pas un possesif)life.
- the girls education: il manque la marque de l'appartenance.
-to them education.
- Educate (mettre au gérondif)the girls is traditionally considered as an useless expense because they are going to live in another family when they were married: concordance des temps.
- But they are ( THEY ARE = ils sont)lots of others (pas au pluriel) factors
- the non-educate (participe passé) girls come by (pas la bonne préposition)disadvantaged communities like lowers castes)
- Their school career was also shorter than the boys: mettre au présent.
- Yes and in (à enlever)within total population, the pourcentage (orthographe)of literate women stay (pas le bon mot ici)also under the men: about 65% in 2011, against 82% for the mens (men est déjà un mot pluriel).
- the others (pas au pluriel)countries,
- India stay (pas le bon mot ici + conjugaison)one of the country where desire for (pas la bonne préposition)change the woman conditions (il manque la marque de la possession)
Réponse: Reportage/ Radio de gerondif, postée le 09-03-2016 à 12:36:19 (S | E)
Bonjour,
les traductions doubles comme "the man passes transmits the name" ou les synonymes entre parenthèses sont en général typiques des traducteurs automatiques.... du moins dans la première partie...
Réponse: Reportage/ Radio de bishem91, postée le 09-03-2016 à 18:16:02 (S | E)
Bonjour,
Merci pour vos corrections.
Hello everybody I’m going to do a little report about a commonplace subject in any society: the equality between men and women. This report will concern cover particularly the evolution of the status of the woman in India.
Intro : In todays age woman in India has a very fragile social position. The condition of women is very variable according to time, classify her social status, religions but also the state, the region, the city or the countryside. In traditional India the woman is considered as lower than the man. First belonging to their father then to their husband. Men and, in particular the father or the elder son of the family, hold the moral and economic authority.
Even nowadays the man passes the name of his lineage through his sons and inherits the family fortune : he is the undisputed chief of the family.
We are now going to listen to our guest Akila MANSON schoolteacher for 10 years in India who is going to announce us its opinion on the status of the Indian woman.
Hello.
I want to say that it has always been a pride to get a son in India. The birth of a son is particularly favored because he keeps the name of the father, inherits the family heritage like you said and they are authorized to do the Hindus funeral rites and this is prohibited to the girls. So when they have a girl it’s jugged like a needless thing. A last thing is that for her marriage they were obliged to pay the costs and offer to the family of their future in-laws an expensive dowry that obliged them to economize all their life.
I want to talk about the girl’s education. The weak social position of the girls have generally been a brake to their education.
Educating the girls is traditionally considered as an useless expense because they are going to live in another family when they are married.
But there are lots of other factors that they prevent the school entry of the girls like the social inequalities (two thirds of the non-educated girls come from disadvantaged communities like lowers castes) or their utility to domestic tasks. Their school career is also shorter than the boys.
Yes and within total population, the percentage of literate women remain also under the men: about 65% in 2011, against 82% for the men.
So despite progress in the last decades and when we compare to the evolution of the other countries, India keeps one of the country where desire for change the woman’s conditions is not enough widespread in the population for a radical change but I hope that will happen!
So it was Kate Harrison here journalist for the NHBC radio.
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