Pièce de théâtre/aide

Pièce de théâtre/aide
Message de mar4gaux posté le 03-11-2012 à 12:34:06 (S | E | F)
Hello

nous devons écrire une pièce de théâtre pour le cours d'anglais mais c'est le début de l'année donc nous avons un peu de mal et sûrement des tonnes de fautes...
Merci beaucoup si vous prenez le temps de corriger nos erreurs!

1) - Oh, she is ugly!
- Do you have blue eyes X?
- X is a looser!
- Looser, Looser...
- She is very horrible!
- Ouuuh! X is ugly!
She runs away and cries.

2) - Why this student is bullied?
- Nobody likes that student.
- What is her name?
- X.
- She seems no nasty.
- I don't like that girl, she is very stupid.
- It isn't a way to treat his students! Maybe X is different but she is a student like the others.

3) - Hello X. Why are you sad?
- The other students don't like me! And the teacher neither do he.
- Oh! Don't be sad! I go call your parents X.
- No! No! Please, don't! My parents don't love me...
- Why they don't love you?
- Because I haven't got blue eyes and I am ugly.
- I spoke with them, toomorow. Go at home X.
- Thank you Sir.

4) - Why haven't got blue eyes? The girls who have blue eyes are very, very beautiful. Look at Marie, she is so beautiful and the other students love her. If I am like her all the people would like me. And my parents too...
- Who has she?
- She is very different!
- She speaks at her miror?
- Yes, it is strange. That child is strange.
- What does she tell?
- She is obsessed by the blue eyes...
The phone rings.
- I go respond.

5) - Hello, M. and Ms X. Your daughter is rejected by the other and it isn't good for her...
- Yes, X is very different and she isn't able to belong. She prefers be alone and read.
- I think that it isn't the case. She wants to belong. She thinks that you don't love her.
- It's wrong! We love X but she is a hard child. We spoke with her tonight. Good bye M. Y.
- Goodbye.

6) - Oh! Look at that!
- It's X's parents!
- They are very different from her.
- Yes, her mother are very class.
- And look at her father, he looks like at a politician.
- Yes, he is very tall!

Merci beaucoup de votre aide et à très vite ;)

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Modifié par lucile83 le 03-11-2012 13:00

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Réponse: Pièce de théâtre/aide de sherry48, postée le 03-11-2012 à 12:47:28 (S | E)
Hello.
1) Looser is an adjective. Change to a noun.

2) - Why this student is bullied?
Use standard question form.
- She seems no nasty.
- - It isn't a way to treat his students! Start with that.
3) - Hello X. Why are you sad?
- The other students don't like me! And the teacher neither do he.
- Oh! Don't be sad! I go call your parents X.
- No! No! Please, don't! My parents don't love me...
- Why they don't love you? Use standard question form.
- Because I haven't got blue eyes and I am ugly.
- I spoke with them, toomorow. Go at home X.
- Thank you Sir.

4) - Why haven't ___ got blue eyes? The girls who have blue eyes are very, very beautiful. Look at Marie, she is so beautiful and the other students love her. If I am like her all the people would like me. And my parents too...
- Who has she?
- She is very different!
- She speaks at her miror?
- Yes, it is strange. That child is strange.
- What does she tell?
- She is obsessed by the blue eyes...
The phone rings.
- I go respond. (infinitive)

5) - Hello, M. and Ms X. Your daughter is rejected by the other__and it isn't good for her...
- Yes, X is very different and she isn't able to belong. She prefers be alone and read.
.
- It's wrong! We love X but she is a hard child.
6) - Yes, her mother are very class.
- And look at her father, he looks like at a politician.
Sherry

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Réponse: Pièce de théâtre/aide de violet91, postée le 03-11-2012 à 13:03:28 (S | E)
Hello

Une trame qui peut être intéressante ...
Avant de copier / coller le texte en indiquant ce qui ne va pas : quatre gros points à reprendre .
- la 3ème pers sg du présent simple avec 's' ou ' es' = très grave .
- La forme négative : aux -négation- base verbale .
- La " " interrogative ; aux -sujet inversé -base verbale : ' Elementary , my dear '
- Confusion entre notion de passé et futur . To be going to ( aller faire quelque chose avec intention ) et will ('ll) ou won't + infinitif sans to : pour un futur simple .
Vérifie aussi sur le dictionnaire le sens des mots dont tu n'es pas sûre ( répondre ...) Il serait peut -être bon d'inventer des prénoms aux interlocuteurs pour mieux suivre le dialogue et il faut mettre à part ou en italique, les indications scéniques .
Allez ! C'est parti !

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