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Correction texte Johannesburg
Message de mobilik posté le 14-02-2007 à 11:33:03 (S | E | F | I)
Hello,
Pourrez-vous me corriger mon exercice ? S'il vous plait.
Je dois écrire un texte qui prendra en compte la situation et les phrases suivantes. Je dois exprimer la cause, le but, la conséquence, la concession et l’opposition (J'ai affiché les mots en couleur)
Je dois utiliser des structures variées (10 structures différentes en tout). Je peux ajouter d’autres éléments au texte de départ.
At university, I have two very good friends from South Africa. Last year, my friends decided to get married during the summer in Johannesburg since it is their hometown.
I’m a very good friend of theirs and I was invited to the wedding. I’m a student, that's why I do not have a job. I did not think I could possibly afford the trip because the flight was very expensive. Though, I managed to go to Johannesburg so as to attend their wedding. Thanks to my parents who paid for the flight. I did not think they would like me to go on that trip. Yet, they were thrilled when they heard I was invited to stay in South Africa. They were extremely happy to contribute in order this trip. So, I decided to give them a nice present. Although I did not buy souvenirs. I came back with a film I made with all the people I met and all the places I visited. Now, they want to go there too
Est-ce qu'il y a des fautes dans mon texte ?
Merci pour votre correction,
A bientot sur Anglais Facile !
Message de mobilik posté le 14-02-2007 à 11:33:03 (S | E | F | I)
Hello,
Pourrez-vous me corriger mon exercice ? S'il vous plait.
Je dois écrire un texte qui prendra en compte la situation et les phrases suivantes. Je dois exprimer la cause, le but, la conséquence, la concession et l’opposition (J'ai affiché les mots en couleur)
Je dois utiliser des structures variées (10 structures différentes en tout). Je peux ajouter d’autres éléments au texte de départ.
At university, I have two very good friends from South Africa. Last year, my friends decided to get married during the summer in Johannesburg since it is their hometown.
I’m a very good friend of theirs and I was invited to the wedding. I’m a student, that's why I do not have a job. I did not think I could possibly afford the trip because the flight was very expensive. Though, I managed to go to Johannesburg so as to attend their wedding. Thanks to my parents who paid for the flight. I did not think they would like me to go on that trip. Yet, they were thrilled when they heard I was invited to stay in South Africa. They were extremely happy to contribute in order this trip. So, I decided to give them a nice present. Although I did not buy souvenirs. I came back with a film I made with all the people I met and all the places I visited. Now, they want to go there too
Est-ce qu'il y a des fautes dans mon texte ?
Merci pour votre correction,
A bientot sur Anglais Facile !
Réponse: Correction texte Johannesburg de jean31, postée le 14-02-2007 à 11:43:20 (S | E)
Bonjour,
Félicitations pour la qualité de ton anglais.
La seule petite erreur que je vois concerne le verbe contribute.
In order to ne peut être suivi que d'un infinitif.
La seule solution : ...contribute TO the trip.
Keep up the good work!
Réponse: Correction texte Johannesburg de mobilik, postée le 15-02-2007 à 09:49:44 (S | E)
Bonjour,
C'est noté pour le verbe contribute !
Merci !
Réponse: Correction texte Johannesburg de jean31, postée le 15-02-2007 à 12:02:49 (S | E)
You're .
Réponse: Correction texte Johannesburg de magstmarc, postée le 15-02-2007 à 12:26:13 (S | E)
Very good indeed
Une phrase me chiffonne quand même : "Although I did not buy souvenirs." : ce serait une proposition subordonnée, on attend la fin.
"Bien que je n'aie pas acheté de souvenirs,...?"
Donc, soit il ne faut pas de point et continuer la phrase, soit tu changes "although" en ... (nevertheless, however, ou yet ?)
Hope it helps
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Modifié par lucile83 le 15-02-2007 14:37
Typing mistake, oops