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Message de sonibrit posté le 23-02-2005 à 20:05:42 (S | E | F | I)
Les consignes:
Write a text (80 words) about an event of your life that was a success +
an event that was a failure: Use cause, consequence, success and failure.

Voici mes deux textes :

The event of my life that was a success it's is the English test.
It was the last year at the end of the third term third, our english teacher we said that we would have an English test next the following week. At During the week-end, I revised like a crazy since I'm keen on this language.Then, when it was at the end of my English test, I gave the copy my sheet and I was persuaded to have successed succeeded as I had learnt and understood it very well. In fact, she gaves gave us the test and I managed to have a good mark that's why I were was so happy.

The event of my life which was a failure it's is the day when I had to sing on stage. First, my friend had proposed me to sing on stage together.Then, she had convinced me that we have going to would succeed as we have were going to repeat everyday.When we had arrived on stage, we sang the first song then the second song one. It was a nightmare for my brother made the parrot and suddenly I canned not to couldn't sing anymore. So I had annoyed ( I was so annoyed ? ).

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Edité par bridg le 23-02-2005 20:06
Hello, nous ne sommes pas des correcteurs anoymes mais des membres d'un même groupe qui nous entraidons, dans lequel il est de mise de respecter les règles élémentaires de politesse: bonjour, pourriez vous ... s'il vous plaît et merci.

modification de titre

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Edité par serena le 24-02-2005 15:26
Correction de ton texte en rouge.