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Message de clymy posté le 2004-11-14 12:24:05 (S | E | F | I)
pouvez vous me corriger ca merci
In our life of all the days, we must buy all the things of base like the food, the clothes, and the things of comfort too, like the housing. Moreover, for have a pleasant life, sparetime activities are very expensive. In our society, people who have enough money are tranquil. The publicity in the television incite to consummate and consummate necessit money.
However, up to a point money don't be the priority of this modern world. Indeed, when political men decide big projects to the country, the environment must not be forget . There will be more outlays to wrestle with pollution of the air the water... Then, to protect our health, whereas that is not always the economic priorities.
in conclusion, personnally, I think money has become the priority in modern society. INdeed, today, you need money because the life is expensive. If you don't have money, you can't live easily.
pouvez vous me corriger ca merci
In our life of all the days, we must buy all the things of base like the food, the clothes, and the things of comfort too, like the housing. Moreover, for have a pleasant life, sparetime activities are very expensive. In our society, people who have enough money are tranquil. The publicity in the television incite to consummate and consummate necessit money.
However, up to a point money don't be the priority of this modern world. Indeed, when political men decide big projects to the country, the environment must not be forget . There will be more outlays to wrestle with pollution of the air the water... Then, to protect our health, whereas that is not always the economic priorities.
in conclusion, personnally, I think money has become the priority in modern society. INdeed, today, you need money because the life is expensive. If you don't have money, you can't live easily.
Réponse: re:correction aidez moi!! de bridg, postée le 2004-11-14 12:35:08 (S | E)
Climy,
Tu ne viens sur le site que pour nous donner des textes à te corriger (3 textes en 4 jours que tu déposes et tu pars ensuite pour ne revenir que pour chercher la correction!!!).
Je te rappelle quand même qu'ici il est de règle de donner autant que l'on reçoit, sinon il existe des sites payants spécialisés. Il serait sympa de ta part de t'en souvenir à l'avenir
Réponse: re:correction aidez moi!! de frederiquebain, postée le 2004-11-14 12:47:39 (S | E)
In our every days life, we must buy all the basic things, like food, clothes or things for our comfort , like the housing. Moreover, for having a pleasant life, we need sparetime activities but they are very expensive. In our society, people who have enough money are peaceful. On Television,the advertising encourages us to consume and consume and that's require money.
Je vous ai fait que la première partie : attention les phrases sont trop longues et certains mots n'existent pas. Essayer de refaire le reste avec mes conseils. Le but est que ça soit votre travail, Bon courage
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Edité par frederiquebain le 2004-11-14 12:49:29
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