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Aide pour un cv
Message de jonasan posté le 24-03-2006 à 09:20:34 (S | E | F | I)
~~Salut les pro de l'english~~
Bonjour!!

J'aurais besoin d'aide pour ma lettre de motivation.
enfin ce n'en ai est pas vraiment une mais si vous pouviez me conseiller quelques changements.

Je recherche du boulot sur Tokyo.
Mon anglais ne se doit pas d'être parfait mais bon...Il y a un minimum je pense.

Merci d'avance pour votre aide précieuse !

Ps : j'enverrais une petite carte du Mont fuji à celui qui l'aidera !

Hello,

My name is Jonathan
I am a French man of 24 years old.
I live actualy in Tokyo with a Working Holiday Visa.
I started this W.H visa 4 weeks ago and of course i am looking for a job in your country.
I had experience with kids.
I did many summer and winter vacations in France with kids during 4 years.
It was for childrens from the age of 4 to 12 years old.
It was a very good experience, i love childrens and i need kids around me.
Teach and take care of them is important and so interesting for my life that's why i decided to follow this way and stoped my Art's school formation.
Then i started a private school for teachers during 3 years.
I learn how teach how manage a classroom.
After my graduation i worked in an Pre school / elementary school in my country.
I was assistant teacher during 3 years.
I enjoyed my work but my decision was take, i want to live with my Japanese girl friend.
I think about mariage with her at th end of my working holiday.
It's so important for me to continue my job with my skills in Japan.
I can't speak a basic Japanese
and of course i can understand many sentences and i can speak with japanese's kids i am sure.
I learn everyday with my girlfriend japanese language and i want to progress in it.

If you think my profile could interest you or if you have any suggestions for help me, it will be so fantastic.
I send my resume with this mail for know more about my level.

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Modifié par bridg le 24-03-2006 11:47
CV => divers

Réponse: Aide pour un cv de jean31, postée le 24-03-2006 à 10:03:31 (S | E)
Hello Jonathan,

Here are a few tips.

My name is Jonathan.
I am a Frenchman AND 24 years old.
PRESENTLY I live in Tokyo ON a Working Holiday Visa.(actually = faux ami = en réalité )
... and of course I am looking for ... (I s'écrit TOUJOURS avec la majuscule)
I HAVE had SOME TEACHING experience with kids. (sans cette précision, on pourrait se méprendre sur le type d'expérience, if you see what I mean ...!)
I TOOK PART in many Summer and Winter (majuscule aux noms des mois) HOLIDAY CAMPS (je suppose) with kids in France FOR four years.
It was for childreN (pluriel irrégulier !) RANGING FROM 4 to 12.
It was a very good experience BECAUSE I (voir plus haut) love kids and need THEM (pour éviter la répétition) around me.
TeachING and takING care of them is SO important and interesting for my WORKING life THAT I decided to follow this way and stopped my Art school TRAINING.
Then I JOINED a private school for teachers TRAINING WHERE I STUDIED FOR 3 years.
I learnT (prétérit irrégulier) how to teach and manage a FORM. (= classe d'élèves)
After my graduation, I worked in a Pre-elementary school in my country.
I was AN assistant teacher FOR 3 years.
I enjoyed my work but I HAD TAKEN A decision : I want to live with my Japanese girlfriend.
I INTEND TO MARRY her at the end of my working holiday.
It's so important for me to BE GIVEN THE OPPORTUNITY to work in Japan.
I CAN (affirmation, je suppose ?) speak a basic Japanese and of course I can understand many sentences SO THAT I am sure I can TALK with Japanese kids.
Every day, I KEEP ON learnING the Japanese language with my girlfriend and I AM KEEN ON PROGRESSING.
SHOULD my profile interest you, SHOULD you NEED some more information, I WILL BE GLAD TO OBLIGE.
PLEASE FIND my résumé HEREWITH.

I LOOK FORWARD TO HEARING FROM YOU.

YOURS SINCERELY,

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Good luck.

Réponse: Aide pour un cv de jonasan, postée le 24-03-2006 à 11:09:00 (S | E)
Merci beaucoup, Jean 31 !
Rapide et bien expliqué !
Arigato gozaimasu ( thanks very much en japonais )

N'hésite pas à me donner ton adresse par mail et je t'envoie une petite carte depuis le Japon pour te remercier.Chose promise...

Merci encore

Jonathan

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Modifié par willy le 24-03-2006 19:51

Réponse: Aide pour un cv de jean31, postée le 24-03-2006 à 16:35:14 (S | E)
Bonjour Jonathan,

Ton intention est pleine de délicatesse et j'y suis tès sensible, mais ton merci suffit amplement à mon bonheur.
Que le Pays du Soleil Levant te soit favorable !
Cordialement,
Jean

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