correction d'une lettre en anglais
Message de flap posté le 26-07-2005 à 12:11:13 (S | E | F | I)
Salut tout le monde !
je voudrais partir comme jeune fille au pair en Irlande l'année prochaine, et pour ça il faut que j'ecrive une lettre de motivation aux familles. Je l'ai fait, mais étant donné mon niveau très faible, je sais que c'est bourré de fautes.
Est ce que vous pourriez m'aider en m'indiquant ce qui ne va pas, je vous en serai infiniment reconnaissante !!

Alice (flap)



My name is Alice Haffner and I’m eighteen. I leave with my family in Pierre-Bénite, near Lyon. I am very motivated to go in Ireland to take care of your children and discover a new culture. It will be also a very good experience about my future studies. Indeed, I plan to make studies in journalism with the aim of view to be reporters-photographs, that’s why I need to speak good English.
I’m convinced that live in an Irish family for several month correspond perfectly in my personality: I love travelling, meet people who have different culture of mine. Lately I travelled much in various countries. And it is what gave me the desire for leaving to discover your country.

I can’t wait to discover Irish people and the splendid landscape of your country. But until this time, I can speak to you about my life in France: I have just obtain the School Leaving Certificate. At school, I was in an art section. I leave with my two parents and my little sister, Agathe, who is 16 years ago. I have as well a great sister, Pauline, 21 years ago, who studies this years in Germany.
For my free time, I like to make photos of landscape and people. As well I like to see my friends to go to the cinema, walk downtown. Etc… And sometimes we go on holiday together.
I’m experienced in the world of work. Actually, I worked in a shop in the capacity as saleswoman. I was also cleaner in a hospital during one month last summer. But above all I make often Baby Sitting to several families during weekends, evenings and holidays. As much to say to you that I make this job with much pleasure. It is like leisure for me to take care of children, I near wearies myself to play with them, tell stories before they fall asleep…. I also like to distract them in their making make activities such as the drawing, the parlour games. As I make circus like activity, it sometimes happens to me to distract the children by making numbers small show from juggling or clown. I did that at the time of birthdays, or quite simply because the children asked it to me.
I’m very motivated to become au pair in your family, and it delays to me to make knowledge with you and your children. I sincerely hope to become a member of your family.
With very soon !
Alice
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Edité par bridg le 26-07-2005 12:31