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Let's suggest 102/ Taking it easy 48
Message de here4u posté le 01-02-2026 à 21:33:12 (S | E | F)
Hello dears,

Another easy exercice that everyone can do! Let's write together...

Comme l'Expression libre est la compétence la plus difficile à bien acquérir dans l'apprentissage d'une langue, il nous faut nous y entraîner, même si c'est notre langue maternelle, d'ailleurs...

Certains m'avaient dit être gênés d'exprimer des idées personnelles ( - ils avaient l'impression - souvent fausse - de les exprimer maladroitement ). Vous savez que je ne vous demande pas de " raconter votre vie " si vous ne le désirez pas... Je souhaite juste vous voir vous exprimer sur tout sujet aussi " librement " que possible.
De plus, je pense que vous aurez maintenant compris que pour moi, toute expression, même maladroite, est intéressante et a de la valeur. Elle nous stimule tous à " trouver mieux " !

Voici les questions auxquelles vous pourrez répondre :

1) If you could change one thing about the world today, what would it be?

2) Describe a moment in your life (or an imagined situation) that changed the way you see things.

3) Do you like playing board games at home or in game bars?

Vous pouvez répondre à 1 ou 2 questions au choix en mp en notant bien les références - et développer celle(s) que vous voulez, jusqu'à atteindre en tout un maximum d'environ 150 mots.

Envoyez-moi vos réponses en mp et je publierai une première série que vous 'corrigerez' (en bleu d'abord pendant deux jours) puis en vert. Une fois le premier texte 'corrigé' au mieux, je publierai ensuite la deuxième série... (sans changements donc ! ) Vous gagnez de la liberté (celle de ne pas parler de plusieurs sujets, ceux qui ne vous " inspirent pas "... Vous écrivez la longueur que vous voulez, vous pouvez choisir d'inventer, de plaisanter, ou de répondre avec sérieux... Nous vous suivrons !

Cet exercice sera pour vous un ou en fonction de la qualité de vos écrits et des difficultés (surmontées) dans la prestation...

Cet exercice sera corrigé le vendredi 13 février 2026 ! Go for it! with THE FORCE.

Réponse : Let's suggest 102/ Taking it easy 48 de here4u, postée le 02-02-2026 à 13:44:37 (S | E)
Hello dear Friends!

Here is already the first ANSWER to my questions. Thanks for being so faithful and eager to work...

ANSWER A: Topic one: please, indicate possible mistakes and underline what looks clumsy to you.

If I had a magic wand to change the world, I would spread LOVE all over the planet. With just a little LOVE in everything, anything becomes possible. Self-love, love for others, because Love means respect, kindness, understanding, tolerance. No more hatred, no more tyranny, no envy or jealousy either. No one would covet their neighbour's land, food, and shelter- everything for everyone- because love also means sharing.
The Earth is large enough and has enough resources for everyone. Love one another. Make love, not war. The message is not new. With my wand, people and governments would finally understand that love should replace threats and reprisals, and the pride of those who seek to be the most powerful in the world would be replaced by goodness and humility... Please, instead of preparing for war to have peace, I would say: SPREAD LOVE.

for your help.

Réponse : Let's suggest 102/ Taking it easy 48 de gerold, postée le 03-02-2026 à 13:20:59 (S | E)
Hello!

ANSWER A: Topic one: please, indicate possible mistakes and underline what looks clumsy to you.

A good text, there‘s not much to say.

If I had a magic wand to change the world, I would spread LOVE all over the planet. With just a little LOVE in everything, anything becomes possible. Self-love, love for others, because Love means respect, kindness, understanding, tolerance. No more hatred, no more tyranny, no envy or jealousy either. No one would covet their neighbour's land, food, and shelter- everything for everyone- because love also means sharing. The Earth is large enough and has enough resources for everyone. Love one another. Make love, not war. The message is not new. With my wand, people and governments would finally understand that love should replace threats and reprisals, and the pride of those who seek to be the most powerful in the world would be replaced by goodness and humility... Please, instead of preparing for war to have peace, I would say: SPREAD LOVE.

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Modifié par gerold le 04-02-2026 00:17

Réponse : Let's suggest 102/ Taking it easy 48 de magie8, postée le 05-02-2026 à 05:56:51 (S | E)
hello dears
Thank you Gerold, voici mes suggestions de correction
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If I had a magic wand to change the world, I would spread LOVE all over the planet. With just a little LOVE in everything, anything becomes possible.( Love oneself, love for others, because Love means respect, kindness, understanding, tolerance. No more hatred, no more tyranny, no envy or jealousy either. No one would covet their neighbour's land, it ( would have food, shelter and all the necessary raw materials for everyone because love also means sharing. The Earth is large enough and has enough resources for everyone. Love one another. Make love, not war. The message is not new. With my wand, people and governments would finally understand that love should replace threats and reprisals, and the pride of those who seek to be the most powerful in the world would be replaced by goodness and humility... Please, instead of preparing for war to have peace, I would say: SPREAD LOVE.

Réponse : Let's suggest 102/ Taking it easy 48 de gerold, postée le 06-02-2026 à 11:37:04 (S | E)
Hello!

Magie!.

If I had a (magic) (not necessary, a wand is a magic device) wand to change the world, I would spread LOVE all over the planet. With just a little LOVE in everything, anything becomes possible.( Love for oneself, love for others*, because love means respect, kindness, understanding, tolerance. No more hatred, no more tyranny, no envy or jealousy either. No one would covet their neighbour's land, it ( would have there would be food, shelter and all the necessary raw materials for everyone because love also means sharing. The Earth is large enough and has enough resources for everyone. Love one another. Make love, not war. The message is not new. With my wand, people and governments would finally understand that love should replace threats and reprisals, and the pride of those who seek to be the most powerful in the world would be replaced by goodness and humility... Please, instead of preparing for war to have peace, I would say: SPREAD LOVE.

* Without "for", the first love is a verb, the second a noun. "Self-love" does not fit here because it could be understood as "narcissism".

Réponse : Let's suggest 102/ Taking it easy 48 de here4u, postée le 06-02-2026 à 20:17:28 (S | E)
Hello dears,

Merci pour votre enthousiasme à travailler encore et toujours à l'amélioration du travail de vos camarades.

Je vous présente tout de même la réponse suivante, car vous avez travaillé quatre jours sur le premier, excellent, texte, et c'est parfait. Vous pouvez toujours rajouter ce que vous voulez en mp ou sur le Forum.

ANSWER B: Topic 2: Describe a moment in your life (or an imagined situation) that changed the way you see things.

I was travelling through Tibet, and I had the opportunity to visit a buddhist monastery. I don't know how it could have happened, but at one moment we went into a room where a young monk was having his exam. An older monk was asking questions to the young man, and apparently the answers were not always exactly the right ones... But what struck me was that the older monk was not angry or depreciative at all ; in fact both of them were laughing, just as if the mistakes were some pleasant jokes! I forgot to say that I was a young teacher at that time... I wouldn't say it totally changed my way of conducting exams, but I have always remembered that moment, without knowing exactly what to make of it... Maybe, even unconsciously, it brought a touch of 'Zen' to my practice ?

Please, indicate possible mistakes, and underline what looks clumsy to you. for your help!

Réponse : Let's suggest 102/ Taking it easy 48 de gerold, postée le 08-02-2026 à 09:18:01 (S | E)
Hello!

ANSWER B: Topic 2: Describe a moment in your life (or an imagined situation) that changed the way you see things.

Again a very good text. I would rewrite the first sentence to avoid "and".

I was travelling through Tibet, and I had the opportunity to visit a buddhist monastery. I don't know how it could have happened, but at one moment we went into a room where a young monk was having his exam. An older monk was asking questions to the young man, and apparently the answers were not always exactly the right ones... But what struck me was that the older monk was not angry or depreciative* at all ; in fact both of them were laughing, just as if the mistakes were some pleasant jokes! I forgot to say that I was a young teacher at that time... I wouldn't say it totally changed my way of conducting exams, but I have always remembered that moment, without knowing exactly what to make of it... Maybe, even unconsciously, it brought a touch of 'Zen' to my practice ?

* My spellchecker doesn't like this word. I have found it in Merriam-Webster but not in Cambridge dictionary. Moreover, even if "depreciative" existed, it would not be correctly used here.

Réponse : Let's suggest 102/ Taking it easy 48 de happynutmeg13, postée le 10-02-2026 à 08:59:33 (S | E)
Hello!

I suggest this (with gerold's help, thank you)

I was travelling through Tibet, and I had the opportunity to visit a buddhist monastery. While travelling through Tibet, I had the opportunity to visit a Buddhist monastery. I don't know how it could have happened, but at one moment we went into a room where a young monk was having his exam. An older monk was asking questions to the young man, and apparently the answers were not always exactly the right ones... But what struck me was that the older monk was not angry or depreciative nor did he show any contempt at all ; in fact both of them were laughing, just as if the mistakes were some pleasant jokes! I forgot to say that I was a young teacher at that time... I wouldn't say it totally changed my way of conducting exams, but I have always remembered that moment, without knowing exactly what to make of it... Maybe, even unconsciously, it brought a touch of 'Zen' to my practice ?

Je ne comprends pas ce qui choque avec le 'and' dans la 1è phrase mais je m'en remets à la science du correcteur

Réponse : Let's suggest 102/ Taking it easy 48 de gerold, postée le 10-02-2026 à 10:38:09 (S | E)
Hello!

happynutmeg!

I was travelling through Tibet, and I had the opportunity to visit a buddhist monastery. While travelling through Tibet, I had the opportunity to visit a Buddhist monastery. I don't know how it could have happened, but at one moment we went into a room where a young monk was having his exam. An older monk was asking questions to the young man, and apparently the answers were not always exactly the right ones... But what struck me was that the older monk was not angry or depreciative deprecatory/disparaging* nor did he show any contempt at all ; in fact both of them were laughing, just as if the mistakes were some pleasant jokes! I forgot to say that I was a young teacher at that time... I wouldn't say it totally changed my way of conducting exams, but I have always remembered that moment, without knowing exactly what to make of it... Maybe, even unconsciously, it brought a touch of 'Zen' to my practice? No space before "?". But perhaps a full stop would be better as it's not really a question.

* It seems that a word or a judgment may be depreciative, not a person.
Je ne comprends pas ce qui choque avec le 'and' dans la 1è phrase mais je m'en remets à la science du correcteur. Cela ne me choque pas vraiment, je trouve seulement que cette phrase "sonne" mieux avec une proposition principale et une subordonnée plutôt que deux propositions indépendantes.

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