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Message de here4u posté le 18-10-2026 à 23:16:54 (S | E | F)
Hello dears,

Comme l'Expression libre est la compétence la plus difficile à bien acquérir dans l'apprentissage d'une langue, il nous faut nous y entraîner, même si c'est notre langue maternelle, d'ailleurs...
Another easy exercice that everyone can do! Let's write together...

Certains m'avaient dit être gênés d'exprimer des idées personnelles ( - ils avaient l'impression - souvent fausse - de les exprimer maladroitement ). D'autre part, vous savez que je ne vous demande pas de " raconter votre vie " si vous ne le désirez pas... Je souhaite juste vous voir vous exprimer sur tout sujet aussi " librement " que possible.
De plus, je pense que vous aurez maintenant compris que pour moi, toute expression, même maladroite, est intéressante et a de la valeur. Elle nous stimule tous à " trouver mieux " !

Voici les questions auxquelles vous pourrez répondre :

1) "A woman's job is never done!"

2) If you could choose your Xmas present, what would it be?

3) What is your favourite famous monument?

Répondez à 1 ou 2 questions au choix en mp en notant bien les références - et développez celle(s) que vous voulez, jusqu'à atteindre en tout un maximum d'environ 150 mots.

Envoyez-moi vos réponses en mp et je publierai une première série que vous 'corrigerez' (en bleu d'abord pendant deux jours, sans donner 'votre solution') puis en vert, en suggérant une ou des solutions. Une fois le premier texte 'corrigé' au mieux par d'autres membres, je publierai ensuite la deuxième série... (sans changements donc !) Vous gagnez de la liberté (celle de ne pas parler de plusieurs sujets, ceux qui ne vous " inspirent pas "... Vous écrivez la longueur que vous voulez, vous pouvez choisir d'inventer, de plaisanter, ou de répondre avec sérieux... Nous vous suivrons !

Cet exercice sera pour vous un ou en fonction de la qualité de vos écrits et des difficultés (surmontées) dans la prestation...

Cet exercice sera corrigé le jeudi 29 octobre 2026 ! Go for it! with THE FORCE.

Réponse : Let's suggest/ 119 - Taking it easy/ 65 de here4u, postée le 21-10-2026 à 10:37:16 (S | E)
Hello,

Quelques ennuis techniques ont retardé la publication de cette première réponse... AHHHHHHHH Computers are not always user-friendly...
Répondez vite, car une deuxième réponse attend déjà d'être traitée ! à vous !

ANSWER A: topic 3: please, indicate possible mistakes and underline what looks clumsy to you.

Among all the monuments I have seen in the four corners of the world, I was the most impressed by ? the TAJ MAHAL located at AGRA in India.
The TAJ MAHAL is a mausoleum built by the Mughal Emperor Shah Jahan in memory of his favorite, beloved wife Muntaz Mahal to house her tomb. Then it is also housed of Shah Jahar himself.
Jahan and Muntaz were married during 19 years and were an inseparable couple who loved each other deeply. Muntaz Mahal died aftergiving birth to their 14th child.
Started in 1631 the construction of all the buildings and gardens occupied 20,000 workers and craftsmen during 22 years.
The TAJ MAHAL is a masterpiece which attracts millions of tourists a year.
Imagine a huge dome all in white marble surrounded by 4 other smaller ones rising on a large sand stone quadrilateral, itself covered with black or white marble panels inlaid with precious and semi-precious stones. These stones aligned to form tall spires, flowers, fruits, mixed with calligraphy. The whole thing is flanked by 4 huge minarets.
IT IS BREATHBREAKING
I stayed a whole day from dawn to sunset. The entire building is reflected in a water pool; its colors change according to the sun light.
Not only is the monument a love message, but it evokes wealth, at the same time harmony,
purity, spirituality. On this site, I felt calm and happy.

to the writer, and to all of you for your future help!

Réponse : Let's suggest/ 119 - Taking it easy/ 65 de gerold, postée le 21-10-2026 à 12:20:48 (S | E)
Hello!

ANSWER A: topic 3: please, indicate possible mistakes and underline what looks clumsy to you.

An interesting text

Among all the monuments I have seen in the four corners of the world, I was the most impressed by ? the TAJ MAHAL located at AGRA in India.
The TAJ MAHAL is a mausoleum built by the Mughal Emperor Shah Jahan in memory of his favorite, beloved wife Muntaz Mahal to house her tomb. Then it is also housed of Shah Jahar himself.
Jahan and Muntaz were married during 19 years and were an inseparable couple who loved each other deeply. Muntaz Mahal died aftergiving birth to their 14th child.
Started in 1631 the construction of all the buildings and gardens occupied 20,000 workers and craftsmen during 22 years.
The TAJ MAHAL is a masterpiece which attracts millions of tourists a year.
Imagine a huge dome all in white marble surrounded by 4 other smaller ones rising on a large sand stone quadrilateral, itself covered with black or white marble panels inlaid with precious and semi-precious stones. These stones aligned to form tall spires, flowers, fruits, mixed with calligraphy. The whole thing is flanked by 4 huge minarets.
IT IS BREATHBREAKING
I stayed a whole day from dawn to sunset. The entire building is reflected in a water pool; its colors change according to the sun light.
Not only is the monument a love message, but it evokes wealth, xx at the same time harmony,
purity, spirituality. On this site, I felt calm and happy.

Réponse : Let's suggest/ 119 - Taking it easy/ 65 de magie8, postée le 23-10-2026 à 07:04:23 (S | E)
Hello dears
Mon essai d'amelioration avec les precieuses indications de Gerold . Un grand MERCI

(Amongst all the monuments I have seen in the four corners of the world, (I like the TAJ MAHAL located/situated (in AGRA in India.
The TAJ MAHAL is a mausoleum built by the Mughal Emperor Shah Jahan in memory of his (favourite,beloved /dearest wife Muntaz Mahal to house her tomb. Then it is also (the tomb of Shah Jahar himself.
Jahan and Muntaz were married during 19 years and were (a couple whose bond was unbreakble. Muntaz Mahal died (after giving birth to their 14th child.
Started in 1631 the construction of all the buildings and gardens occupied 20,000 workers and craftsmen during 22 years.
The TAJ MAHAL is a masterpiece (that attracts millions of tourists a year.
Imagine a huge dome all in white marble surrounded by 4 other smaller ones rising on a (large quadrilateral of sandstones that is covered with black or white marble panels inlaid with precious and semi-precious stones. These stones are (aligned/aligning/arranged/disposed to form tall spires, flowers, fruits, mixed with calligraphy. The whole thing is flanked by 4 huge minarets.
IT IS BREATHBREAKING
I stayed a whole day from dawn to sunset. The entire building is reflected in( a vast piece of water; its colors change( with the light of the sun.
Not only is the monument a love message, but it evokes wealth, (moreover at the same time harmony,purity, spirituality. On this site, I felt calm and happy.

Réponse : Let's suggest/ 119 - Taking it easy/ 65 de gerold, postée le 23-10-2026 à 19:28:20 (S | E)
Hello!

Magie!

(Amongst Of (better than among(st) all the monuments I have seen in the four corners of the world, (I liked the most the TAJ MAHAL located/situated (in AGRA in India. (or : the Taj Mahal of Agra, in India, impressed me the most)
The TAJ MAHAL is a mausoleum built by the Mughal Emperor Shah Jahan in memory of his (favourite,beloved /dearest wife (beloved would be enough I think) Muntaz Mahal to house her tomb. Then it is also housed (the tomb of Shah Jahar himself.
Jahan and Muntaz were married during 19 years and were (a couple whose bond was unbreakable. Muntaz Mahal died (after giving birth to their 14th child.
Started in 1631 (comma) the construction of all the buildings and gardens occupied 20,000 workers and craftsmen during 22 years.
The TAJ MAHAL is a masterpiece (that attracts millions of tourists a year.
Imagine a huge dome all in white marble surrounded by 4 other smaller ones rising on a (large rectangular sandstone basis (a quadrilateral is a two-dimensional figure, that doesn't seem to fit here) that is covered with black or white marble panels inlaid with precious and semi-precious stones. These stones are (aligned/~~aligning~~/arranged/disposed to form tall spires, flowers, fruits, mixed with calligraphy. The whole thing is flanked by 4 huge minarets.
IT IS BREATHBREAKING
I stayed a whole day from dawn to sunset. The entire building is reflected in( a vast piece of water (or simply) pool, "water pool" is a pleonasm) ; its colors change( with the light of the sun/sunlight (one word) .
Not only is the monument a love message, but it evokes wealth, (and ~~moreover~~ at the same time harmony,espacepurity, spirituality. On this site, I felt calm and happy.

Réponse : Let's suggest/ 119 - Taking it easy/ 65 de here4u, postée le 24-10-2026 à 00:44:38 (S | E)
Hello dear friends!

Magie and Gerold! Thanks for your great work. Here are my indications:

(Amongst Of (better than among(st) all the monuments I have seen in the four corners of the world, (I liked the most the TAJ MAHAL located/situated (in AGRA in India. (or : the Taj Mahal of Agra, in India, impressed me the most)
The TAJ MAHAL is a mausoleum built by the Mughal Emperor Shah Jahan in memory of his (favourite,beloved /dearest wife (beloved would be enough I think YES! ) Muntaz Mahal to house her tomb. Then it is also housed (the tomb of Shah Jahar himself.
Jahan and Muntaz were married during 19 years and were (a couple whose bond was unbreakable. Muntaz Mahal died (after giving birth to their 14th child.
Started in 1631,(comma) the construction of all the buildings and gardens occupied 20,000 workers and craftsmen during [again?!]22 years.
The TAJ MAHAL is a masterpiece (that attracts millions of tourists a year.
Imagine a huge dome all in white marble surrounded by 4 other smaller ones rising on a (large rectangular sandstone basis (a quadrilateral is a two-dimensional figure, that doesn't seem to fit here) that is covered with black or white marble panels inlaid with precious and semi-precious stones. These stones are (aligned/~~aligning/~~arranged/~~disposed~~ to form tall spires, flowers, fruits, mixed with calligraphy. The whole thing is flanked by 4 huge minarets.
IT IS BREATHBREAKING
I stayed a whole day from dawn to sunset. The entire building is reflected in( a vast piece of water (or simply) pool, "water pool" is a pleonasm) ; its colors change( with the light of the sun/sunlight (one word) .
Not only is the monument a love message, but it also evokes wealth, (and moreover at the same time together with harmony, purity and spirituality. On this site, I felt calm and happy.

An extremely good and well corrected text... (apart from the "during" horrors!)

Réponse : Let's suggest/ 119 - Taking it easy/ 65 de here4u, postée le 24-10-2026 à 00:51:49 (S | E)
Hello again,

Here is ANSWER B: Topic 3: what is your favourite famous monument? Please, indicate possible mistakes and underline what looks clumsy to you.

The monument which comes to my mind is mont St Michel. I remember having quite a shock when I first discovered its impressive outline for real. Of course the shape is very famous, and I was familiar with it.... But nonetheless, I was taken aback by the unexpected and wonderful view. I was in my car, driving on the road leading directly to it, and suddenly I got this wonderful, striking sight: it was as though the abbey and all the houses around had just emerged from the sea. Actually, the photos I had seen didn't really convey the flat surroundings of the fields and of the sea at low tide- or maybe I hadn't noticed so far. It was early in the morning and besides, at this time of the year, there were very few tourists and cars, so that the whole impression was one of stately beauty, of quietness and serenity...

for your help!

Réponse : Let's suggest/ 119 - Taking it easy/ 65 de gerold, postée le 25-10-2026 à 18:11:36 (S | E)
Hello!

Here is ANSWER B: Topic 3: what is your favourite famous monument? Please, indicate possible mistakes and underline what looks clumsy to you.

A very good text. I can't see any real mistake.

The monument which comes to my mind is mont St Michel. I remember having quite a shock when I first discovered its impressive outline for real. Of course the shape is very famous, and I was familiar with it.... But nonetheless, I was taken aback by the unexpected (unexpected but familiar?) and wonderful view. I was in my car, driving on the road leading directly to it, and suddenly I got this wonderful (repetition (also sight/view)), striking sight: it was as though the abbey and all the houses around had just emerged from the sea. Actually, the photos I had seen didn't really convey the flat surroundings of the fields and of the sea at low tide - or maybe I hadn't noticed so far. It was early in the morning and besides, at this time of the year, there were very few tourists and cars, so that the whole impression was one of stately beauty, of quietness and serenity...

Réponse : Let's suggest/ 119 - Taking it easy/ 65 de here4u, postée le 25-10-2026 à 22:22:09 (S | E)
Hello dears,

I agree with Gerold, this text is extremely good!

I'm not going to give you my indications so early, but I found a few 'clumsy' words or expressions that 'struck' me in such an excellent work, and one ambiguity that should be cleared up.
I'm sure you'll perfect your friend's expression! Go for it!

Réponse : Let's suggest/ 119 - Taking it easy/ 65 de gerold, postée le 27-10-2026 à 17:42:00 (S | E)
Hello!

A very good text. I can't see any real mistake.

The monument which comes to my mind is Mont St Michel. I remember having quite a shock when I first discovered its impressive outline for real. Of course the shape is very famous, and I was familiar with it.... But nonetheless, I was taken aback by the unexpected (unexpected but familiar?) and wonderful view. I was in my car, driving on the road leading directly to it, and suddenly I got this wonderful (repetition (also sight/view)), striking sight suggestion : and suddenly the monument appeared before me in all its striking glory : it was as though the abbey and all the houses around had just emerged from the sea. Actually, the photos I had seen didn't really convey the flat surroundings of the fields and of the sea at low tide - or maybe I hadn't noticed so far/before. It was early in the morning and besides, at this time of the year, there were very few tourists and cars, so that the whole impression was one of stately beauty, of quietness and serenity...

I think the ambiguity lies in the phrase "the flat surroundings of the fields and of the sea" and more precisely in the word "surroundings" : I suppose you mean the fields and the sea rather than a larger area around them?
Suggestion: the flat landscape of fields and sea ... (do you really want to mention that it's "flat"?)

Réponse : Let's suggest/ 119 - Taking it easy/ 65 de happynutmeg13, postée le 27-10-2026 à 19:44:44 (S | E)
Hello

Thank you for the correction 🙏
Yes, I want to emphasize the flat land all around, because of the contrast between the mount and the rest of the landscape...

Réponse : Let's suggest/ 119 - Taking it easy/ 65 de here4u, postée le 28-10-2026 à 14:20:20 (S | E)
Hello dears,

As I said above, I won't have much to change to this extremely good text...

My last indications:

A very good text. I can't see any real mistake.

The monument which comes to my mind is Mont St Michel. I remember having quite a shock when I first discovered its impressive outline for real. Of course the shape is very famous, and I was familiar with it... But nonetheless, I was taken aback by the unexpected, - unexpected but familiar - and wonderful view. I was in my car, driving on the road leading directly to it, and suddenly the monument appeared before me in all its striking glory: it was as though the abbey and all the houses around had just emerged from the sea. Actually, the photos I had seen didn't really convey the flat surroundings of the fields and of the sea at low tide - or maybe I hadn't noticed before. It was early in the morning and besides, at this time of the year, there were very few tourists and cars, so that the whole impression was one of stately beauty, of quietness and serenity...

I think the ambiguity lies in the phrase "the flat surroundings of the fields and of the sea" and more precisely in the word "surroundings" : I suppose you mean the fields and the sea rather than a larger area around them?
Suggestion: the flat landscape of fields and sea ... (do you really want to mention that it's "flat"?)

J'aime bien 'the flat surroundings of the fields and of the sea'...
In my opinion, at this time of the year, is ambiguous! Who will tell me why?

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