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Message de doggie posté le 21-09-2008 à 19:33:06 (S | E | F)
Rebonjour,
Comme vous le savez il y a deux parties au writing. Pouvez-vous me corriger s'il vous plaît ?

Sujet :

Write an answer to your friend. This is a part of the letter you receive :

I always go shopping with my friends at the weekend. What do you like buying when you go shopping ? What kinf of shops are there near where you live ?

Texte :

22nd september

Dear Philippe,
Thanks for writing me back! For answering your quesion, I love buying books. I often go shopping with my mother who buys food book. Near the place I live we can find a lot of kind of shops beacause I live in the centre of Dublin? However, it's quite difficult to find a furniture shop ! For you, it's not diffficult, too. I include somme photos of my town showing different shops. I hope you will come at home in holiday. Kiss your family for me. See you soon
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Merci d'avance
Doggie
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Modifié par bridg le 21-09-2008 20:32
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Réponse: Dear Philippe/Correction de hoger, postée le 21-09-2008 à 20:37:03 (S | E)
Generally, a good job!
Some remarks:
Dear Philippe,
Thanks for writing me back! ~~For~~ [wrong preposition; correct: "to"] answering your quesion [spelling!], I love buying books. I often go shopping with my mother who buys food book [do you mean, "cookbooks"?]. Near the place where I live we can find ~~a lot of~~ many [to avoid repetition of "of"] kind [after "many," "a lot of," etc., you have to use plural] of shops beacause [spelling!] I live in centre of Dublin? [why the question mark after a statement?] However, it's quite difficult to find a furniture shop ! For you, it's not diffficult [spelling!], ~~too~~ you use "too" with the affirmative (= aussi); after a negative sentence, it's "[not] either" (= [non] plus). I include somme [spelling!] photos of my town showing different shops. I hope you will come at ["at" is a place where you are; you go to a place or you just go "home" (no preposition); in your context it's better to say "visit me" rather than "come to my home/my house"] home in [article!] holiday. Kiss [not usually used in English; better: "say hi to"] your family for me. See you soon

Réponse: Dear Philippe/Correction de doggie, postée le 21-09-2008 à 20:51:51 (S | E)
Merci beaucoup pour la correction
A bientôt
Doggie

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