Let's suggest/14

Let's suggest/14
Message de here4u posté le 11-05-2022 à 11:59:16 (S | E | F)
Hello, dear Workers!

C'est reparti ! Voici un nouvel exercice d'expression ... Espérons que vous allez vous y risquer ...
Je vous en prie ... Osez participer ! N'ayez pas peur de vous tromper, de faire des fautes, ou d'écrire "hors sujet". Les fautes nous sont utiles, puisqu'elles permettent de réfléchir, de faire des corrections et de donner des explications ...
Paradoxalement, faire une faute est la meilleure chose qui puisse NOUS arriver, à vous, comme à moi ! Merci à ceux qui en font !
N'ayez pas de scrupules, vous ne serez pas jugés, mais simplement guidés et aidés ...
C'est en pratiquant, encore et souvent, que les progrès viendront ! N'hésitez donc pas à intervenir, pour la correction des expressions de vos co-workers, comme pour l'écriture de votre propre expression si vous le désirez ... (Vous pouvez aussi - et certains ne s'en privent presque pas ...) écrire sur le "mode de la conversation", comme vous "parleriez" !)

Voici le rappel des modalités de la première partie de l'exercice :
1. Je vous demande une EXPRESSION sur le sujet proposé (un sujet unique par exercice) à m’envoyer en mp dès que possible … (=> 130 - 150 mots au maximum.)

2. Le plus tôt possible, une première expression est publiée sur le Forum, et CHACUN est libre de « corriger » UNE FOIS ( en collant le texte et indiquant les erreurs EN BLEU, et en soulignant ce qui vous semble maladroit et que vous voudriez changer, sans donner la « correction » (forme correcte), comme il se doit.) Un seul devoir à la fois sera publié pour corriger…

Les modalités complètes sont accessibles :
Lien internet


( Je vous les rappellerai au fur et à mesure de la progression du travail )
Cet exercice sera ... ce que vous en ferez, ou Correction en ligne le jeudi 26 mai 2022.
Voici le nouveau sujet !

"What do you think of the Internet as a way to make friends?" (130 - 150 mots au maximum.)

May THE FORCE be with You (with all of you! ) Everybody's welcome! Do not hesitate to write!

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Réponse : Let's suggest/14 de here4u, postée le 14-05-2022 à 17:05:06 (S | E)
Hello, dear workers!

"What do you think of the Internet as a way to make friends?" (130 - 150 mots au maximum.)

EXPRESSION N°1: you may indicate possible mistakes in blue and underline what you think is clumsy!

The internet makes it easier for us to get in touch with people who have the same interests as us. It broadens our horizons: we can know interesting people we may have never met otherwise. It can really help shy persons to make the first move...
However, ill-intentioned internet users can make a good impression while chatting with them whereas they expect something else than friendship. As long as you've not been rubbing shoulders with someone for long enough, I don't think you really know them.
That's why we should use the internet carefully, remaining anonymous as long as possible. When we've finally decided to meet each other, we should keep a clear head and not let ourselves get involved in unwanted situations. That way, we can make the most of the internet to make friends. (141 words)

to the writer and to all the potential readers of this text. Please, step in TO HELP.

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Réponse : Let's suggest/14 de here4u, postée le 17-05-2022 à 10:18:47 (S | E)
Hello!

Everyone must be sheltering from the heat...
Green allowed. The following try will be posted tonight or tomorrow morning.

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Réponse : Let's suggest/14 de here4u, postée le 18-05-2022 à 09:06:58 (S | E)
Hello dear workers,

EXPRESSION N°1: ready to receive final suggestions:

The internet makes it easier for us to get in touch with people who have the same interests as us. It broadens our horizons: we can know interesting people we may have never met otherwise. It can really help shy persons to make the first move...
However, ill-intentioned internet users can make a good impression while chatting with them whereas they expect something else than friendship. As long as you've not been rubbing shoulders with someone for long enough, I don't think you really know them.
That's why we should use the internet carefully, remaining anonymous as long as possible. When we've finally decided to meet each other, we should keep a clear head and not let ourselves get involved in unwanted situations. That way, we can make the most of the internet to make friends. (141 words)


EXPRESSION N°2: you may indicate possible mistakes in blue and underline what you think is clumsy!

« To make friends » : if you want to say, to write, to chat, to talk or to chatter about subjects, and to ; exchange ideas, it’s OK. The internet in this case is a way to break insulation and to abble people who cannot go out or to travel to « meet » people. In fact, people must be conscious that on the other end the « future friend » lies very certainly. There are many ways to lie : you can enbroider you’re ugly reality, you can omit to say things, you can invent a figure, and after, tell lie after lie to build a real story. People ; have dreams and of immagination …
Nevertheless, « to make girl-friend/ or boyfriend » is more delicate again … You should be distrustful and not to be vulnerable because people 130 often have unavowed or same shameful and dishonest goals : they can take advantage of naive people and extort money or sexual favors from credulous peoples. 155

for your help!

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Réponse : Let's suggest/14 de maxwell, postée le 18-05-2022 à 20:23:53 (S | E)
Hello!
EXPRESSION 2:
« To make friends » : if you want to say, to write, to chat, to talk or to chatter about subjects, and to ; (punctuation)exchange ideas, it’s OK. The internet in this case is a way to break insulation (I didn't know that! ) and to abble people who cannot go out or to travel to « meet » people. In fact, people must be conscious that on the other end the « future friend » lies very certainly. There are many ways to lie : you can enbroider you’re ugly reality, you can omit to say things, you can invent a figure, and after, tell lie after lie to build a real story. People ; (punctuation)have dreams and of immagination …
Nevertheless, « to make girl-friend/ or boyfriend » is more delicate again … You should be distrustful and not to be vulnerable because people 130 often have unavowed or same shameful and dishonest goals : they can take advantage of naive people and extort money or sexual favors from credulous peoples. 155

J'aurais reformulé plusieurs choses autrement

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