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Let's Suggest/22

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Let's Suggest/22
Message de here4u posté le 10-09-2022 à 19:55:44 (S | E | F)
Hello, dear workers!

Here is the new topic we'd like to read about...
A few words of explanations are necessary... You remember I had asked you to suggest topics... You did! Wonderfully! and I thank you for it.
One of the topics was quite tempting just now, but I needed Lucile's permission because it might be too "political" and infringe one of the rules of the site... Yet, Lucile accepted quite enthusiastically [Thanks Lucile! ] and I'm sure you'll know how to express your feelings and ideas respectfully...

Here is today's topic:

Write the tribute you would like to pay to Queen Elizabeth II, showing how the Monarchy was well preserved and respected throughout her reign.


I know it's difficult... but you're up to the task! The number of words will be a little different: from 120 to 170. Try to be concise and sincere, and PLEASE, do not hesitate to participate!

Voici le rappel des modalités de la première partie de l'exercice :
1. Je vous demande une EXPRESSION sur le sujet proposé à m’envoyer en mp dès que possible …
2. Le plus tôt possible, cette première expression sera publiée sur le Forum, et CHACUN sera libre de « corriger » UNE FOIS ( en collant le texte et indiquant les erreurs EN BLEU, et en soulignant ce qui vous semble maladroit et que vous voudriez changer, sans donner la « correction » (forme correcte), à ce moment, comme il se doit.) Un seul devoir à la fois sera publié pour corriger …

Les modalités complètes sont accessibles sur le lien suivant :
Lien internet


( Je vous les rappellerai au fur et à mesure de la progression du travail )
Cet exercice sera ... ce que vous en ferez : , ou I trust You!
Correction en ligne le lundi 26 septembre 2022.

J'attends vos envois en mp et publierai le premier dès que possible.
MAY THE FORCE BE WITH YOU and with US!



Réponse : Let's Suggest/22 de here4u, postée le 14-09-2022 à 11:34:14 (S | E)
Hello !

Voici notre première courageuse EXPRESSION! Bravo d'avoir osé écrire en premier !

EXPRESSION N°1


In honour of the Queen of England, I would go for a walk in a yellow coat and a flowered hat of the same colour.
For me, Queen Elisabeth was the symbol of the classic elegance. She had her own style recognisable among all. Her style was a decorum.
The monarchy was preserved and respected by her presence, her bearing, with her warm smile,her mischievous blue eyes, and of course by her courage, her knowledge of the world and people. Queen Elisabeth was extremely clever and above all what it was the most admirable, was her stoicism in front adversities and her sense of duty.
Queen Elisabeth was the guardian of the aristocracy values.
- " TO maintain, Never complaint, never explain" was her own words.
I think, she was the most famous personality in the world. 135 MOTS

A vous de nous aider à indiquer les fautes en bleu ... et souligner ce qui est maladroit !

Green on the 16th. a lot!



Réponse : Let's Suggest/22 de maxwell, postée le 14-09-2022 à 17:52:59 (S | E)
Hello!

EXPRESSION N°1

In honour of the Queen of England, I would go for a walk in a yellow coat and a flowered hat of the same colour.
For me, Queen Elisabeth was the symbol of the classic elegance. She had her own style recognisable among all. Her style was a decorum.
The monarchy was preserved and respected by her presence, her bearing, with her warm smile,her mischievous blue eyes, and of course by her courage, her knowledge of the world and people. Queen Elisabeth was extremely clever and above all (ponctuation) what it was the most admirable, was her stoicism in front adversities and her sense of duty.
Queen Elisabeth was the guardian of the aristocracy values.
- " TO maintain,(1) Never complaint, never explain" was her own words.
I think, she was the most famous personality in the world. 135 MOTS

(1) Cela fait partie de "her own words" ?


Quelques fautes de ponctuation



Réponse : Let's Suggest/22 de maxwell, postée le 16-09-2022 à 20:22:12 (S | E)
Hello!

EXPRESSION N°1: suggestions

In honour of the Queen of England, I would go for a walk in a yellow coat and a flowered hat of the same colour.
For me, Queen Elisabeth was the symbol of (1)classic elegance. She had her own style recognisable among all. She was a model of dignity and (1) decorum.
The monarchy was preserved and respected by her presence, her bearing, with her warm smile, her mischievous blue eyes, and of course by her courage, her knowledge of the world and people. Queen Elisabeth was extremely clever and above all, what (2) was (3) most admirable, was her stoicism in front of adversity, (4) and her sense of duty.
Queen Elisabeth was the guardian of the aristocracy's (5) values.
She would maintain her "Never complain, never explain" stance in any circumstance.
I think she was the most famous personality in the world. 135 MOTS

(1) pas d'article devant un nom abstrait (sauf si on ajoute des éléments qui apportent des précisions)
(2) what est le sujet (it est donc en trop)
(3) what was the most admirable thing ; ou bien : what was most admirable
(4) in front of
adversity plutôt que adversities Lien internet

(5) aristocratic values ; ou bien avec the : the aristocracy's values



Réponse : Let's Suggest/22 de here4u, postée le 18-09-2022 à 14:32:50 (S | E)
Hello dears,

Maxwell pour ton aide !
Pardon à l'auteur de l'EXPRESSION N°2 ... J'aurais pu/dû? publier son (long) travail hier, mais j'ai enfin pu alléger mes contraintes et ne pouvais vraiment travailler valablement hier.

EXPRESSION N°2:

The Queen! No need to tell her name, everybody understood : the queen Elizabeth II of England, Scotland, the Wales, northern Irlande and the Commonwealth... ( a little number of people know the countries and how it is big, but it is !)
How can a single woman reigns on a so big surface and diversity of lands ?How could she do it ? Reign on United kingdom is a performance … so many peoples are republicans and think the royals are useless and expensive.
Her smile, strength, determination and legitimity changes all. There is a part of God in her. She was Sacred. That woman isn’t ordinary, like you and me… Her destiny and her blood has put her in this position and she has proved perfect for the task. The Monarchie is strong and the people loved her. She was a person, but she was a symbol also. They think she represented them well and were as proud of UK as she was. I am sad for her to-day, I am sad for people to-day… I know Charles has been conceived, up brought, formed, educated, «prepared » for the task and hope he will be a great King too, his mother’s son, The King Charles III. 202 words.

Please, help us!
Indiquer les fautes en bleu ... et souligner ce qui est maladroit !



Réponse : Let's Suggest/22 de maxwell, postée le 18-09-2022 à 16:18:01 (S | E)
Hello!

EXPRESSION N°2:

The Queen! No need to tell her name, everybody understood : the queen Elizabeth II of England, Scotland, the Wales, northern Irlande and the Commonwealth... ( a little number of people know the countries and how it is big, but it is !)
How can a single woman reigns on a so big surface and diversity of lands ?How could she do it ? Reign on United kingdom is a performance … so many peoples are republicans and think the royals are useless and expensive.
(un mot de liaison de concession serait le bienvenu) Her smile, strength, determination and legitimity changes all(*). There is a part of God in her.(*) She was Sacred. That woman isn’t (*) ordinary, like you and me… Her destiny and her blood has put her in this position and she has proved perfect for the task. The Monarchie is strong and the people loved her. She was a person, but she was a symbol also. They think she represented them well and were as proud of UK as she was. (**) I am sad for her to-day, I am sad for people to-day… I know Charles has been conceived, up brought, formed, educated, «prepared » for the task and hope he will be a great King too, his mother’s son, The King Charles III. 202 words.

Pas d'espace avant la ponctuation, mais un espace après la ponctuation !

(*) ce choix du présent est audacieux, mais à mon avis pas idéal
(**) ambigu : je comprends ici que les sujets de la reine étaient aussi fiers du Royaume-Uni que la reine ne l'était (fière du Royaume-Uni). Est-ce bien l'intention de l'auteur ?



Réponse : Let's Suggest/22 de vaiana, postée le 21-09-2022 à 02:15:43 (S | E)
Hello everyone

EXPRESSION N°2: SUGGESTIONS

The Queen! No need to say her name, everybody understands : Queen Elizabeth II of England, Scotland, Wales, Northern Ireland and the Commonwealth... ( a few people are aware of the countries her reign consisted of and how widespread they are but, trust me, they are!)
How could a single woman reign over an area that wide and diversified ?How could she do it/ how did she manage ? Reigning over the United Kingdom was (really) a performance … so many republican people think royalty is useless and expensive!
Her smile, strength, determination and legitimity changed all. There was a part of God in herself; she was sacred. This woman wasn’t ordinary like you and me… Her destiny and her blood conferred this role on her and she has proved perfect for the task. The British monarchy is strong and people loved her. She was a person, but (she was) a symbol as well. British citizens think she embodied them well and were as proud of the U.K. as she was. I am sad for her and them today… I know Charles has been conceived, brought up, formed, (educated,) 'prepared'/ trained for the task and hope he is* a great King, too(, his mother’s son, King Charles III.)

* I think that using the present tense after "to hope" sounds more natural when referring to the future

See you!



Réponse : Let's Suggest/22 de maxwell, postée le 21-09-2022 à 18:15:48 (S | E)
Hello!

EXPRESSION N°2: SUGGESTIONS

The Queen! No need to say (1) her name, everybody has understood : Queen Elizabeth II of the United Kingdom: England, Scotland, the Wales, northern Ireland and the Commonwealth... (few (2)people can list the countries and know how big they are (3), but they certainly are!)
How can only one (4)person reign over such a large and diversified kingdom? (5) How could she do it? Reigning (6) over the (7) United kingdom is a performance… so many people are in favor of a republican system (8) and think the royal family is useless and costs too much (9).

However, (10) her smile, her (11)strength, her (11)determination and her (11)legitimity changed (12) everything. (13) There was (12) a part of God in her. She was sacred. That woman wasn’t (12) ordinary, like you and me… Her destiny and her blood put (12)her in this position and she proved (12) to be (14) perfect for the task. The monarchy is still strong and people loved her. She was a person, but she was a symbol too (15). They think she represented them well and were as proud of the (7)UK as she was (16).

I am sad for her today, I am also (15)sad for her subjects… I know Charles has been conceived, brought up, formed, educated, «prepared» for the task and I (17)hope he will be a great King too, his mother’s son, King (18) Charles III. 202 words.

J'ai corrigé la ponctuation : pas d'espace avant mais un espace après
(1) To say sth ; to tell sb sth
(2) people est au pluriel => ce serait : a few people (pour dire quelques personnes)
Mais je pense qu'on veut plutôt dire ici : peu de gens savent => few people
(3) How + adj sth is
Ici on parlait des pays => pluriel
(4) single m'a fait penser à célibataire (mais veut dire aussi seul).
En même temps, je ne pouvais pas enlever l'idée de "seul", sinon, le texte devenait sexiste...
Pour éviter l'ambiguïté de single, et ne pas soulever de polémique, je propose donc : only one person
(5) exclamatifs : avec un nom=> such : such a +adj + nom
(6) c'est le fait de, l'action de régner => gérondif indispensable
(7) the United Kingdom, the United States (of America)
(8) J'ai explicité le propos (sinon, pour rappel, pas de s aux adjectifs)
(9) il me semble que expensive s'applique aux choses, pas aux personnes
(10) mot de concession bien utile pour introduire une antithèse
(11) Effet emphatique créé par le rajout de ce pronom
(12) il me semble que le passé s'impose ici. c'est du passé révolu
(13) changed everything ou bien : changed it all
(14) prove to be : s'avérer, se révéler être Lien internet

(15) aussi en fin de phrase : too ou bien as well. (contrairement à also)
(16) je n'ai pas changé le sens.
Si on avait voulu dire : le peuple était aussi fier du Royaume-Uni que de leur reine : as proud of the UK as of their queen.
(17) rappeler le sujet "I" ne me semble pas inutile car on a cité Charles juste avant
(18) the King ou bien, si on le nomme, King Charles III



Réponse : Let's Suggest/22 de here4u, postée le 23-09-2022 à 21:55:53 (S | E)
Hello, dears!

Here is EXPRESSION N°3: a lot for it! S'il vous plaît, aidez-nous en indiquant les fautes en bleu ... et en soulignant ce qui est maladroit !


EXPRESSION N°3:

Elizabeth II put in a lifetime of service and dedication: her duties always took priority.
Her great success was her ability to move with the times: she tried to make the monarchy more relevant in a changing society. She started to go on a walkabout to meet the public, which hadn't happened before she came to the throne; she preserved Britain's links with the Commonwealth: she was friends with all their leaders; over the years, she took advantage of mass media to make monarchy more accessible, to connect with more people.

The reason she was a successful constitutional monarch was that she much preferred to agree than disagree. Maybe the British loved their queen because she didn't talk about politics: she never openly interfered with politics. Brexit has deeply divided British society: she remained strictly neutral in this conflict.
She understood the importance of silence, of not expressing her opinions, of not reacting. She never put a foot wrong.
"Never explain, never complain" was the royal family's tradition. She kept private feelings hidden from the public. She tried to preserve the unity and dignity in the family.
When monarchy was under threat, she had a sense that she must preserve it: no one is bigger than the institution itself.
During the coronavirus pandemic, she proved to be a woman of wisdom and experience, a symbol of stability, strength and continuity, the kind of person that the public turns to in a time of crisis. She was the mother of the nation. (254 w)

Merci de votre aide !




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