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Message de yrolam posté le 08-02-2019 à 07:38:33 (S | E | F)
Boujour !
Je dois écrire un commentaire de texte en anglais, pourriez vous m'aider avec les fautes ?
Merci pour votre attention.
This document is a lawyer’s speech extracted from the movie “Dead Man Walking” directed by Tim Robbins. It takes place during the trial of Matthew Poncelet’s sentenced to death.
When the lawyer begins his speech, he sharply criticizes the fate already decided of the poor defendants. Even if they face the same judicial system than a wealthy person, they can’t pay a well-known lawyer. Money is game-changing.
His client, Matthew, was in this situation, he had a public defender. To make matters worse, he was inexperienced. He may have not wanted to take such a case because it appeared to him a no-win situation.
Indeed, as the lawyer correctly points out, it was a very short trial, it took the jury only 4 hours to bring Matthew in guilty. He never had a chance to win the trial. He might have felt powerless, misunderstood, and desperate.
Whereas, if he could have paid experienced professionals, he would have been advised and supported.
Then, the lawyer tries to appeal to the emotion of the jurors, by referring to what is the death penalty. He recalls the former ways to kill in history, now considered merciless and inhumane practices. Afterward, he presents with irony the lethal injunctions as “a device that is the most human of all”, at least, only apparently.
In fact, if the convict seems quiet and relaxed, it’s only thanks to the first shot which anesthetize him. Inside his body, it’s a different story, his muscles twist, convulse, and implode. It’s only after the third shot that he died.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 08-02-2019 09:14
Message de yrolam posté le 08-02-2019 à 07:38:33 (S | E | F)
Boujour !
Je dois écrire un commentaire de texte en anglais, pourriez vous m'aider avec les fautes ?
Merci pour votre attention.
This document is a lawyer’s speech extracted from the movie “Dead Man Walking” directed by Tim Robbins. It takes place during the trial of Matthew Poncelet’s sentenced to death.
When the lawyer begins his speech, he sharply criticizes the fate already decided of the poor defendants. Even if they face the same judicial system than a wealthy person, they can’t pay a well-known lawyer. Money is game-changing.
His client, Matthew, was in this situation, he had a public defender. To make matters worse, he was inexperienced. He may have not wanted to take such a case because it appeared to him a no-win situation.
Indeed, as the lawyer correctly points out, it was a very short trial, it took the jury only 4 hours to bring Matthew in guilty. He never had a chance to win the trial. He might have felt powerless, misunderstood, and desperate.
Whereas, if he could have paid experienced professionals, he would have been advised and supported.
Then, the lawyer tries to appeal to the emotion of the jurors, by referring to what is the death penalty. He recalls the former ways to kill in history, now considered merciless and inhumane practices. Afterward, he presents with irony the lethal injunctions as “a device that is the most human of all”, at least, only apparently.
In fact, if the convict seems quiet and relaxed, it’s only thanks to the first shot which anesthetize him. Inside his body, it’s a different story, his muscles twist, convulse, and implode. It’s only after the third shot that he died.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 08-02-2019 09:14
Réponse : Commentaire/ texte de laure95, postée le 09-02-2019 à 17:46:02 (S | E)
Bonsoir,
- during the trial of Matthew Poncelet’s (pas de 's)sentenced to death.
- Even if they face the same judicial system than (pas le bon mot ici)a wealthy person,
- Whereas, (mal utilisé ici)if he could have paid experienced professionals, he would have been advised and supported.
- what is the death penalty: ordre des mots (interrogative indirecte)
- now (as) considered merciless and inhumane practices.
- it’s only thanks to the first shot which anesthetize (faute de conjugaison) him.
- it's only: passé.
Réponse : Commentaire/ texte de yrolam, postée le 09-02-2019 à 19:04:58 (S | E)
Merci beaucoup pour votre réponse!
est-ce que "Even if they face the same judicial system as a wealthy person " serait mieux?
"by referring to what the death penalty is" le sens des mots est il correct ?
Réponse : Commentaire/ texte de gerold, postée le 09-02-2019 à 19:18:24 (S | E)
Bonsoir
the lethal injunctions ... vous confondez avec un mot très proche.
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