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Message de mobilik posté le 12-06-2008 à 17:02:43 (S | E | F)

Hello !

I need some help, please ! Can you help me for the redaction ?

Voici le texte que j'ai rédigé, il comporte (très) certainement des erreurs :

I'm a regular reader and it for diverse reasons. From a scientific and social point of view, we understand fast all the interest that we have to walk and to speak, in the same way as we understand fast all the interest of lira. We have to read for live and survive, the communication being a fundamental notion in our society, not to be alone, to be a part of the human community because only the man, knows how to speak, write and read. There is an obligation to read, but there is also an impossibility to be otherwise made. We do not have to read, we read, it's everything. As we inhale. But besides this aspect of obligation of lira, the reading has to pass by the pleasure, lira brings well of trump card and it's why I like reading. The reading is thus collected under an educative angle, she allows to learn, to enrich or to deepen her knowledge. The reading allows us to put words on ideas which we have difficulty in expressing or in understanding, it is a good method to acquire of the vocabulary, the spelling and the good bass in language. The reading educates us and informs us. Lira, it's to get knowledge of people, places, subjects, situations, periods, cultures, lived, memoirs, thoughts, previous or historic facts, unreal and fantastic facts, that we shall have little or not the luck to discover by one even, is because they are past or imaginary, distant or inaccessible, it is to understand how they will have lived, what they will have seen, felt, liked, suffered. It's to go continents, it's to live adventures. The reading serves for relaxing and for dreaming, for imagining and for travelling in the course of the words in another universe. It is to know the human condition: torments and enjoyments of the love, the sufferings of the famine and the poverty, the glorious epics and the unlimited massacres, the magnificences and the miseries of the courtesans, the musing of the solitary walker. It's to learn what the university of all the knowledges puts in our reach without having to join nor to take examinations. It is to feed our personal relfexion, although that romanticized, certain stories are always very anchored in the reality. It's to have a glance in a summary, in the main part, that of the pages of the book, that we do not have in the reality. It's to hold the universe in the hand, to discover it and to investigate him fervently with its imagination, it is to escape. It's to know and to discover the other one in its variety, the reading cultivates the spirit of opening due to its variety of literary genres (novels, essays) and it is to recognize the others in his nearness, it thus is to know itself, it allows to become identified with a book or with a character, and it is to share all this with those who do not still know him, who will discover him and who will surprise us with their own discoveries. It's to exchange with the other one and to get closer to him, it's to share or to confront a passion or a loathing. Lira, it's to feed an unlimited hunger, a curiosity. Lira, it's to surpass itself.

Désolé pour la longueur de la rédaction mais si vous pourriez me corriger, ce serait sympathique.

Thank you !

Bye.



Réponse: Correction rédaction [Sujet la lecture] de joey93, postée le 12-06-2008 à 18:23:31 (S | E)
Bonjour Mobilik, voilà quelques suggestions :
I'm accustomed to reading and this for many reasons
we don't have to read, we read, that's all
reading should be a pleasure
that's the reason why I like reading
PAS "THE" devant "reading", "the" est un article défini que tu peux employer dans une phrase comme "the reading that you've done wasn't bad at all".
Reading allows to... pas "she" qui est employé pour les êtres humains, plus précisément pour désigner une fille. Donc "it".
To deepen your knowledge.
it's a good method to acquire vocabulary, pas d'aticle "the" agalment pour ce qui suit.
to go to
of love
and poverty
J'avoue ne pas avoir tout lu, FAUTE DE TEMPS, mais revois essentiellement l'emploi des articles.


Réponse: Correction rédaction [Sujet la lecture] de mobilik, postée le 13-06-2008 à 10:36:28 (S | E)
Bonjour,


Merci pour ces précieuses indications !




Réponse: Correction rédaction [Sujet la lecture] de laure95, postée le 13-06-2008 à 18:05:56 (S | E)
Bonjour. Voici ce que tu dois corriger
I'm a regular reader and it (pas besoin) for diverse (change d'adjectif) reasons. From a scientific and social point of view, we understand fast all the interest that we have to walk and to speak, in the same way as we understand fast all the interest of lira . We have to read for (to) live and survive, the communication being a fundamental notion in our society, not to be alone, to be a part of the human community because only the man know how to speak, write and read. We do not have to read, we read, it's everything. As we inhale. But besides this aspect of obligation of lira, the reading has to pass by the pleasure, lira brings well of trump card and it (that)'s why i like reading. The reading is thus collected under an educative angle, she (she: pour une personne) allows to learn, to enrich or to deepen her (à qui ça renvoie?) knowledge. The reading allows us to put words on (in) ideas which (that) we have difficulty in expressing or understanding. It is a good method to acquire of the vocabulary, the spelling and the good bass in language. The reading educates us and informs us (1 seul suffit). Lira, it's (is a dejà un sujet) to get knowledge of people, places, subjects, situations, periods, cultures, lived , memoirs (mot français), thoughts, previous or historic facts.
Désolé, je dois m'arrêter là car j'ai un cours d'anglais à donner. Mais, tu peux déjà corriger ces fautes.




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