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Dialogue niveau 4è/correction
Message de aurelia29 posté le 22-10-2009 à 20:05:38 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
J'ai un devoir d'anglais pour demain (23/10/09)
Je pense avoir fais des fautes d'orthographes et de conjugaison. ( Je ne suis pas très bonne en anglais... )
Si vous pouvez m'aider en corrigeant quelques fautes...
-You look sad ! What's the matter ?
-It's Johanna, the oldest of my younger sister.
-What is she like ?
-She is every evening on the computer, so she doesn't help me to lay the table.
-My little brother is alike. He doesn't want help me yo wash to dishes and he never to sweet up. He is all the time negative and extremely lazy and messy.
-Johanna doesn't want to clean and clear the table. We are quarrel every day.
She's sometime intelligent and nice, but most of the time, she's mean.
-I believe Cindy, the youngest among your younger sister, is charming and nice, aren't you ?
-Yes, Cindy is kind, but she's too extremely jealous and egoistic. I'd like to be an only child !
-Me too ! Brothers and sisters are very annoying !
Merci !!!
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Modifié par bridg le 22-10-2009 20:19
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Message de aurelia29 posté le 22-10-2009 à 20:05:38 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
J'ai un devoir d'anglais pour demain (23/10/09)
Je pense avoir fais des fautes d'orthographes et de conjugaison. ( Je ne suis pas très bonne en anglais... )
Si vous pouvez m'aider en corrigeant quelques fautes...
-You look sad ! What's the matter ?
-It's Johanna, the oldest of my younger sister.
-What is she like ?
-She is every evening on the computer, so she doesn't help me to lay the table.
-My little brother is alike. He doesn't want help me yo wash to dishes and he never to sweet up. He is all the time negative and extremely lazy and messy.
-Johanna doesn't want to clean and clear the table. We are quarrel every day.
She's sometime intelligent and nice, but most of the time, she's mean.
-I believe Cindy, the youngest among your younger sister, is charming and nice, aren't you ?
-Yes, Cindy is kind, but she's too extremely jealous and egoistic. I'd like to be an only child !
-Me too ! Brothers and sisters are very annoying !
Merci !!!
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Modifié par bridg le 22-10-2009 20:19
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Réponse: Dialogue niveau 4è/correction de sanna6, postée le 22-10-2009 à 22:32:13 (S | E)
Bonsoir, J'espère qu'une âme charitable viendra à ton secour !
Je mets ce qui me semble, ne pas aller ! mais il vaut mieux que tu vérifies !!!
You look sad (je ne le mettrai pas comme ça) ! What's the matter ?
-It's Johanna, the oldest of my younger sister." la plus vieille de ma plus jeune soeur !!!"
-What is she like ? What does she like, veut dire qu'est ce qu'elle aime, mais je ne pense pas que c'est ce que tu as voulu mettre ?
-She is every evening on the computer, so she doesn't help me to lay the table.
-My little brother is alike. He doesn't want help me yo wash to dishes(washing the dishes) and he never to sweet(sweeps) up. He is all the time negative and extremely lazy and messy.
-Johanna doesn't want to clean and clear(là, j'ai un doute !) the table. We are quarrel every day.
She's sometimes intelligent and nice, but most of the time, she's mean.
-I believe Cindy, the youngest among your younger sisters, is charming and nice, aren't you ?"j'aurais mis autre chose que aren't you
-Yes, Cindy is kind, but she's (too) extremely jealous and egoistic. I'd like to be an only child !
-Me too ! Brothers and sisters are very annoying !
Les pauvres gosses !!! J'espère que tu seras prête pour demain
Réponse: Dialogue niveau 4è/correction de brettdallen, postée le 22-10-2009 à 22:52:21 (S | E)
Bonsoir,
Je souligne ce qui doit être amélioré...
-You look sad ! What's the matter ?
-It's Johanna, the oldest of my younger sister(très compliqué tout ça!).
-What is she like(ce que vous voulez dire, c'est "c'est quoi son problème?, c'est ça? so "What's the matter with her?") ?
-She is(j'utiliserais le verebe "passer"(du temps) every evening on the computer, so she doesn't help me to lay the table.
-My little brother is alike(ce n'est pas le bon terme, dites "le même"). He doesn't want(manque un mot, voyez comment fonctionne "want") help me yo wash to dishes and he never to(pas de to!) sweet up(? + 3éme personne du singulier, donc...). He is all the time(dites "toujours") negative and extremely lazy and messy.
-Johanna doesn't want to clean and clear the table. We
She's sometime(...) intelligent and nice, but most of the time, she's mean.
-I believe Cindy, the youngest among your younger sister(même en français, c'est vraiment "lourd"), is charming and nice, aren't you(que voulez-vous dire? "isn't she?") ?
-Yes, Cindy is kind, but she's too extremely(choisissez...) jealous and egoistic(vérifiez "égoïste"). I'd like to be an only child !
-Me too ! Brothers and sisters are very annoying !
Ce n'est pas si mal que ça! mieux que vous le présentez en tout cas! faites les corrections et quelqu'un vous aidera sans doute à affiner....
Amicalement.
Réponse: Dialogue niveau 4è/correction de aurelia29, postée le 26-10-2009 à 14:52:47 (S | E)
Merci beaucoup pour vos réponses!
Pour certaines réflexions que vous avez faites sur certaines phrases,comme :
You look sad; the oldest of my younger sister;What is she like;
c'est ma prof d'anglais qui nous a donné un modèle de dialogue avec ses phrases, puis on devait adapter la situation...
en tout cas merci pour les petites fautes que vous m'avez corrigé...
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