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Message de babeth54 posté le 30-01-2011 à 19:36:33 (S | E | F)
Bonsoir,
C'est le dernier paragraphe du texte "Buying into a franchise";
Pourriez-vous s'il vous plait vérifier le temps des verbes que j'ai employés ?
...There are drawbacks, of course. You have to pay the franchise, a start-up fee and a percentage of your profits for the use of their concepts and trademarks, and you have to follow their plan. However, a 90% success rate encourages us to start looking more closely.
When we went to the British Franchise Exhibition at Wembley to find a franchise last April, we found the range was incredible. However, after years of working in jobs in which we had little interest, we wanted a business for which we would have a passion. We could have bought into estate agencies, interior designers, coffee shops, car repairers, but nothing had caught our imagination until we came to the last stand.
The company is called Oil & Vinegar. The idea, John Blogg, the co-founder explains, is a gourmet gift shop where the customer buys luxury foods such as truffles, stuffed olives, herbs and spices and kitchenware all beautifully presented and gift-wrapped. The shops took off in their native Holland and spread across Belgium and Germany. The company is now looked at the Bristih market.
So to the future. Becky and I will quit our decently paid, safe jobs. When we open in a month’s time, it will be the first Oil & Vinegar shop in England. (The first British shop is opening in Glasgow in July). Are we still scared? Very. Are we doing it anyway ? Definitely.
Merci pour votre aide.
Best wishes.
Babeth
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Modifié par lucile83 le 30-01-2011 19:42
Message de babeth54 posté le 30-01-2011 à 19:36:33 (S | E | F)
Bonsoir,
C'est le dernier paragraphe du texte "Buying into a franchise";
Pourriez-vous s'il vous plait vérifier le temps des verbes que j'ai employés ?
...There are drawbacks, of course. You have to pay the franchise, a start-up fee and a percentage of your profits for the use of their concepts and trademarks, and you have to follow their plan. However, a 90% success rate encourages us to start looking more closely.
When we went to the British Franchise Exhibition at Wembley to find a franchise last April, we found the range was incredible. However, after years of working in jobs in which we had little interest, we wanted a business for which we would have a passion. We could have bought into estate agencies, interior designers, coffee shops, car repairers, but nothing had caught our imagination until we came to the last stand.
The company is called Oil & Vinegar. The idea, John Blogg, the co-founder explains, is a gourmet gift shop where the customer buys luxury foods such as truffles, stuffed olives, herbs and spices and kitchenware all beautifully presented and gift-wrapped. The shops took off in their native Holland and spread across Belgium and Germany. The company is now looked at the Bristih market.
So to the future. Becky and I will quit our decently paid, safe jobs. When we open in a month’s time, it will be the first Oil & Vinegar shop in England. (The first British shop is opening in Glasgow in July). Are we still scared? Very. Are we doing it anyway ? Definitely.
Merci pour votre aide.
Best wishes.
Babeth
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Modifié par lucile83 le 30-01-2011 19:42
Réponse: Temps des verbes/fin de notrepere, postée le 30-01-2011 à 19:47:03 (S | E)
Hello!
Did you forget to mark the verb in this sentence? It seems wrong:
However, a 90% success rate encourages us to start looking more closely.
The company is now looked [gerund?] at the Bristih market.
Take a look at this sentence. Since it's NOT the first company any longer, I think the verb you have chosen needs to be reviewed.
(The first British shop is opening in Glasgow in July).
Cordialement
Réponse: Temps des verbes/fin de babeth54, postée le 30-01-2011 à 20:18:22 (S | E)
Bonsoir Notrepère,
Merci pour vos annotations. It is my homework for Wednesday 2nd of February.
1)I forgot to mark the verb : encourages. I forgot any another words. Perhaps, there is a missing word on my sheet.
However, a 90% success rate encourages us to start looking more closely.
2) The company is now looking at the Bristih market.
3)Take a look at this sentence. Since it's NOT the first company any longer, I think the verb you have chosen needs to be reviewed. (The first British shop is opening in Glasgow in July). Could you explain more ?
Thank you in advance.
Cordialement
Réponse: Temps des verbes/fin de notrepere, postée le 30-01-2011 à 21:51:18 (S | E)
Hello!
1)I forgot to mark the verb : encourages. I forgot any another words. Perhaps, there is a missing word on my sheet.
However, a 90% success rate encourages us to start looking more closely.
Yes, this verb is incorrect. If you use "encourages" in the present, this means you will look at it more closely at some point in the future. This fact is what prompted them to look more closely at franchises. Therefore, it encouraged them to do so.
2) The company is now looking at the Bristih market.
3) I think you should leave it as it is: is opening. I can't think of a better verb tense without making it extremely complicated and perhaps too "anglais américain". You could make the argument that it is saying:
When this shop opens in July, it would have been the first shop in Britain, but I'm having a hard time expressing this idea in your sentence as it is worded.
I also noticed that the British and Americans use the conditional tenses differently, so I don't want to give you bad advice.
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