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Message de poleon10 posté le 26-11-2012 à 21:00:02 (S | E | F)
Bonsoir,

je dois écrire un report en anglais sur base d'un graphique de la revue 'The economist'.
Voici le texte, est-ce que vous pourriez m'indiquer s'il y a moyen de l'améliorer au niveau de style et aussi m'indiquer les éventuelles fautes de grammaire ?
Merci d'avance.

Schéma : Lien internet

Youth Unemployment's rates in the World - Analysis
The purpose of this report is to :
- give an overview of youth unemployment* in some countries
- make some remarks about particular cases
- comment on general trends among the different countries

Overview
- On the whole, the youth unemployment rate has risen in every country.
- In some countries such as Netherlands, Austria, Norway, the rate increased by only 1 or 2% between 2008 and 2011.
- However, in other countries such as Spain, Greece and Ireland, the rate nearly doubled.

Trends
They are three main remarks :
- The ‘PIGS’ countries and assimilated to PIGS such as Latvia, who had an already high unemployment rate in 2008, had to endure a huge boom in unemployment during the three year time lapse.
- Germany is the only country for which the unemployment slipped a little.
- Euro area has on average a higher youth unemployment than the US.

Conclusion
- The countries with a small unemployment rate in 2008 only suffered a slight increase between 2008 and 2011.
- The countries with an already large unemployment rate in 2008 had seen their unemployment's rate reach an all-time high.
- In either case, youth unemployment is relatively higher than the global unemployment and should remain our society's main concern.

*youth unemployment englobes the 15-24 years old.

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Modifié par lucile83 le 26-11-2012 21:03

Réponse: Rapport/ chômage de gerondif, postée le 26-11-2012 à 23:48:13 (S | E)
Bonsoir,
Youth Unemployment's rates in the World - Analysis
The purpose of this report is to :
- give an overview of youth unemployment* in some countries
- make some remarks about particular cases
- comment on general trends among the different countries

Overview
- On the whole, the youth unemployment rate has risen in every country.
- In some countries such as the Netherlands(pays pluriel, donc the), Austria, Norway, the rate increased by only 1 or 2% between 2008 and 2011.
- However, in other countries such as Spain, Greece and Ireland, the rate nearly doubled.

Trends
They are three main remarks :
- The ‘PIGS’ countries and assimilated to PIGS such as Latvia, who had an already a high unemployment rate in 2008, had to endure a huge boom in unemployment during the three-year time-lapse.
- Germany is the only country for which ~~the~~ unemployment slipped a little.
- The Euro area has on average a higher youth unemployment than the US.

Conclusion
- The countries with a small unemployment rate in 2008 only suffered a slight increase between 2008 and 2011.
- The countries with an already large unemployment rate in 2008 had(have me paraît plus logique) seen their unemployment's rate reach an all-time high.
- In either case, youth unemployment is relatively higher than the global unemployment and should remain our society's main concern.

*youth unemployment englobes(includes, covers) the 15-24 years old.

Réponse: Rapport/ chômage de poleon10, postée le 27-11-2012 à 21:53:45 (S | E)
Merci beaucoup d'avoir pris le temps de me faire cette correction !

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