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Message de zhales posté le 06-10-2013 à 15:46:31 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
Je cherche à corriger les erreurs (déjà repérées) d'un texte d'anglais mais je ne suis pas sûr de mes réponses.
Quelqu'un pourrait-il valider ou m'aider à corriger ces fautessvp s'il vous plaît?
Voici l'énoncé :
Using the vocabulary seen in class, discuss the following question in about 150 worlds.
An American dating website is planning to enter the French market. Explain how they could make their site popular.
Voici le texte (avec en bleu les fautes de vocabulaire et en rouge celles de grammaire) :
Nowadays a lot of dating websites are used in the world and also in France. Some of them are very popular in the country like "meetic" or "attractive world".
If an American dating website wants to enter into the French market, it is important to check many aspects of itself to guarantees its popularity.
There are three types of primordial elements that it can be ensure.
One of these bases is security, so the website's creator(s) have to engage manpower to scan many screens and can be sure there is not user who do bad or forbidden things.
Secondly if the website have a high level of technology, it have more chances to become famous. For example the fact to extend the access to cellphones with an application for IOS and Android increased user's fidelity.
Finally a great dating website cannot be popular if it doesn't have visibility. It is the marketing aspect wich is composed of a slogan for the website and sometimes a publicity on television.
Voici ma correction (Erreur => correction) :
enter into => enter
to guarantees => to guarantee
primordial => main
it can be ensure => it can be ensured
there is not user => there are not users / there is no users
have *2 => has
increased => increases
user's fidelity => the customer loyalty
wich => which
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Modifié par lucile83 le 06-10-2013 16:03
Message de zhales posté le 06-10-2013 à 15:46:31 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
Je cherche à corriger les erreurs (déjà repérées) d'un texte d'anglais mais je ne suis pas sûr de mes réponses.
Quelqu'un pourrait-il valider ou m'aider à corriger ces fautes
Voici l'énoncé :
Using the vocabulary seen in class, discuss the following question in about 150 worlds.
An American dating website is planning to enter the French market. Explain how they could make their site popular.
Voici le texte (avec en bleu les fautes de vocabulaire et en rouge celles de grammaire) :
Nowadays a lot of dating websites are used in the world and also in France. Some of them are very popular in the country like "meetic" or "attractive world".
If an American dating website wants to enter into the French market, it is important to check many aspects of itself to guarantees its popularity.
There are three types of primordial elements that it can be ensure.
One of these bases is security, so the website's creator(s) have to engage manpower to scan many screens and can be sure there is not user who do bad or forbidden things.
Secondly if the website have a high level of technology, it have more chances to become famous. For example the fact to extend the access to cellphones with an application for IOS and Android increased user's fidelity.
Finally a great dating website cannot be popular if it doesn't have visibility. It is the marketing aspect wich is composed of a slogan for the website and sometimes a publicity on television.
Voici ma correction (Erreur => correction) :
enter into => enter
to guarantees => to guarantee
primordial => main
it can be ensure => it can be ensured
there is not user => there are not users / there is no users
have *2 => has
increased => increases
user's fidelity => the customer loyalty
wich => which
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Modifié par lucile83 le 06-10-2013 16:03
Réponse: Devoir /correction de violet91, postée le 06-10-2013 à 21:51:31 (S | E)
Hello , bref passage , sorry ,
3 main elements that must be gathered and guaranteed .
The customer 's fidelity is all right , I think .
An avertisement / adverts / good advertising on television .
* I am not sure to understand the need for having 'visibility' ...do you mean such a website must often appear in media, especially with good slogans and adverts to reach as many customers as possible ?
Good night .
Réponse: Devoir /correction de zhales, postée le 07-10-2013 à 01:05:46 (S | E)
Hello,
Yes that's it for "visibility", I know it's not very easy to understand for an English native but for a French teacher it seems be alright ^^
So, I only focus blue and red errors for now.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 07-10-2013 16:02
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