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Message de sierow posté le 02-11-2009 à 08:45:02 (S | E | F)
Bonjour tout le monde,
Voila nous avons un résumé à rendre sur une future présentation orale. Nous sommes deux à avoir travaillé dessus et nous en avons rendu deux versions un peu différentes. J'aurais souhaité que de l'aide pour corriger les deux textes (être certain que c'est du bon anglais) et pour que vous me disiez quelles sont les parties que vous préférez.
EN vous remerciant.
Hi all!
We have made a summary for a futur presentation. We made two different summary and we need your help to know if it's written in a good english. If you can correct the text and tell me what do you prefer I will be grateful .
Thanks à lot
Voici les deux textes:
Here they are the two texts:
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This presentation is about natural disasters and how we react against it. Nowadays we can do a lot of things. We can look after diseases, we can fly, we can perform many great things of whom we would never have thought. However controlling or dominating the “Nature” is out of reach. Conquer territories , protect itself from the rain, from the wind and from the cold, we can do that easily. Even destroy the forest or an ecosystem is hopelessly easy. Nevertheless it remains some strengths in which we can't cope with. These strengths are commonly named the “natural disasters”. That's why we wonder to know how to protect itself from them. Therefore the aim is to expose the current solutions to prevent or to fight against natural disasters.
First of all we will explain how do the natural disasters work. Some examples will be given with a short explanation to understand how and why these disasters appear. Then we will try to show how is it possible to forestall/forecast/anticipate/predict it. Furthermore an analyze of the used tools will be made with some examples to illustrate. Finally we will make a survey of the various means set up/applied/used to thwart natural disasters. That is to say giving examples, explaining how does it work and if it effectives. We will see that is important to know how does it work to protect itself. As a matter of fact it is more important to predict the natural disasters because some of them can't be moved away.
Thus the conclusion will be an opening on the limits and on what it remains to make.
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This presentation is about natural disasters and how we react against them. Nowadays the technology has achieved great feats and the man applies her in almost every field of his life.Many things that were invincible in the past, now are made with the touch of a button. The man is able to reach the space and other planetary systems, new drugs are being discovered constantly dealing incurable illnesses and in general the life has become easier by the use of electrical devices which simplify our daily lives.
However controlling or dominating the “Nature” is still a sector that hasn’t been reached. We can protect ourselves from the rain, from the wind and from the cold but we have done little progress on dealing with the earthquakes, the volcanos , the typhoons and in general with the forces of the nature .We can face the problem after its appearance but not prevent it!!
Our aim here is to expose the methods that people use so as to prevent a physical phenomenon and if these methods are effective!
First of all we will define what a natural disaster is and how it is creating. We will give some examples with a short explanation of how and why those phenomena appear. Then we will try to show if it is possible to forestall/forecast/anticipate/predict them and we will make an analyze of the means that we use so as to succeed it and of the international organizations which exist so as to forecast a natural disaster . Also we will try to illustrate the consequences that have in the life of people and to their economy. We will show the importance to know how to prevent a natural disaster before and not trying to solve the problem after!
Thus the conclusion will
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Modifié par bridg le 02-11-2009 09:42
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Message de sierow posté le 02-11-2009 à 08:45:02 (S | E | F)
Bonjour tout le monde,
Voila nous avons un résumé à rendre sur une future présentation orale. Nous sommes deux à avoir travaillé dessus et nous en avons rendu deux versions un peu différentes. J'aurais souhaité que de l'aide pour corriger les deux textes (être certain que c'est du bon anglais) et pour que vous me disiez quelles sont les parties que vous préférez.
EN vous remerciant.
Hi all!
We have made a summary for a futur presentation. We made two different summary and we need your help to know if it's written in a good english. If you can correct the text and tell me what do you prefer I will be grateful .
Thanks à lot
Voici les deux textes:
Here they are the two texts:
____________________________________
This presentation is about natural disasters and how we react against it. Nowadays we can do a lot of things. We can look after diseases, we can fly, we can perform many great things of whom we would never have thought. However controlling or dominating the “Nature” is out of reach. Conquer territories , protect itself from the rain, from the wind and from the cold, we can do that easily. Even destroy the forest or an ecosystem is hopelessly easy. Nevertheless it remains some strengths in which we can't cope with. These strengths are commonly named the “natural disasters”. That's why we wonder to know how to protect itself from them. Therefore the aim is to expose the current solutions to prevent or to fight against natural disasters.
First of all we will explain how do the natural disasters work. Some examples will be given with a short explanation to understand how and why these disasters appear. Then we will try to show how is it possible to forestall/forecast/anticipate/predict it. Furthermore an analyze of the used tools will be made with some examples to illustrate. Finally we will make a survey of the various means set up/applied/used to thwart natural disasters. That is to say giving examples, explaining how does it work and if it effectives. We will see that is important to know how does it work to protect itself. As a matter of fact it is more important to predict the natural disasters because some of them can't be moved away.
Thus the conclusion will be an opening on the limits and on what it remains to make.
___________________________________________
This presentation is about natural disasters and how we react against them. Nowadays the technology has achieved great feats and the man applies her in almost every field of his life.Many things that were invincible in the past, now are made with the touch of a button. The man is able to reach the space and other planetary systems, new drugs are being discovered constantly dealing incurable illnesses and in general the life has become easier by the use of electrical devices which simplify our daily lives.
However controlling or dominating the “Nature” is still a sector that hasn’t been reached. We can protect ourselves from the rain, from the wind and from the cold but we have done little progress on dealing with the earthquakes, the volcanos , the typhoons and in general with the forces of the nature .We can face the problem after its appearance but not prevent it!!
Our aim here is to expose the methods that people use so as to prevent a physical phenomenon and if these methods are effective!
First of all we will define what a natural disaster is and how it is creating. We will give some examples with a short explanation of how and why those phenomena appear. Then we will try to show if it is possible to forestall/forecast/anticipate/predict them and we will make an analyze of the means that we use so as to succeed it and of the international organizations which exist so as to forecast a natural disaster . Also we will try to illustrate the consequences that have in the life of people and to their economy. We will show the importance to know how to prevent a natural disaster before and not trying to solve the problem after!
Thus the conclusion will
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Modifié par bridg le 02-11-2009 09:42
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Réponse: natural disasters /Correction de ririgirl, postée le 02-11-2009 à 11:43:38 (S | E)
first textCette présentation est de catastrophes naturelles et comment nous réagissons contre cela. De nos jours nous pouvons faire beaucoup de choses. Nous pouvons nous occuper de maladies, nous pouvons voler, nous pouvons exécuter beaucoup de grandes choses de ce qui nous n'aurions jamais pensé. Cependant la direction ou la dominance "de la Nature" est hors de portée. Conquérez des territoires, protégez-se de la pluie, du vent et du froid, nous pouvons le faire facilement. Détruisez même la forêt ou un écosystème est désespérément facile. Néanmoins il reste quelques forces dans lesquelles nous ne pouvons pas faire face. Ces forces sont généralement nommées "les catastrophes naturelles". C'est pourquoi nous nous demandons pour savoir(connaître) comment se protéger d'eux. Donc le but est d'exposer les solutions actuelles d'empêcher ou se battre contre des catastrophes naturelles.
Tout d'abord nous expliquerons comment font le travail de catastrophes naturelles. On donnera quelques exemples avec une explication courte pour comprendre comment et pourquoi ces désastres apparaissent. Alors nous essayerons de montrer comment est cela possible de prévenir/prédire/prévoir/prévoir
second textCette présentation est de catastrophes naturelles et comment nous réagissons contre eux. De nos jours la technologie a réalisé de grands exploits et l'homme l'applique dans presque chaque champ(domaine) de sa vie. Beaucoup de choses qui étaient invincibles dans le passé, sont maintenant faites avec le contact d'un bouton. L'homme est capable d'atteindre l'espace et d'autres systèmes planétaires, on découvre de nouveaux médicaments(drogues) ayant constamment affaire des maladies incurables et en général la vie est devenue plus facile par l'utilisation des dispositifs électriques qui simplifient nos vies quotidiennes.
Cependant la direction ou la dominance "de la Nature" est toujours un secteur qui n'a pas été atteint. Nous pouvons nous protéger de la pluie, du vent et du froid mais nous avons fait peu de progrès sur traiter avec les tremblements de terre, les volcans, les ouragans et en général avec les forces de la nature .We peuvent faire face au problème après son apparition(apparence), mais pas l'empêcher!!
Notre but est ici d'exposer les méthodes que les gens(le peuple) utilisent afin d'empêcher un phénomène physique et si ces méthodes sont
franchement je préfére le 1er texte!!!!
Réponse: natural disasters /Correction de ririgirl, postée le 02-11-2009 à 11:47:59 (S | E)
pour moi les deux textes sont cohérant,ne touche plus a rien!!!!!!!c jut un conseil ke je te dis!!!
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