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Message de patisserie87 posté le 25-01-2013 à 12:25:27 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
Ma cousine doit faire une lettre de motivation pour s'inscrire à un cours de SVT en anglais.
Pouvez-vous me donner votre avis sur celle-ci s'il vous plaît ?
"Dear Madame, Dear Sir,
I would like to apply for joining the science course in English.
As I feel an instant connection with animals, I have known from a young age that I wanted to work closely with them.
Admission to veterinary colleges is very competitive and I think that the more I prepare for admission the better my chances will be of getting in.
English is an important skill because veterinary studies now include an obligatory work placement abroad.
So I would be very grateful if you would agree to let me enrol on the sciences course in English. This would enable me to complete my education in sciences and improve my English, and I think that preparing as early as high school is key in success.
Yours Faithfully,"
Merci d'avance !
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Modifié par lucile83 le 25-01-2013 12:27
Message de patisserie87 posté le 25-01-2013 à 12:25:27 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
Ma cousine doit faire une lettre de motivation pour s'inscrire à un cours de SVT en anglais.
Pouvez-vous me donner votre avis sur celle-ci s'il vous plaît ?
"Dear Madame, Dear Sir,
I would like to apply for joining the science course in English.
As I feel an instant connection with animals, I have known from a young age that I wanted to work closely with them.
Admission to veterinary colleges is very competitive and I think that the more I prepare for admission the better my chances will be of getting in.
English is an important skill because veterinary studies now include an obligatory work placement abroad.
So I would be very grateful if you would agree to let me enrol on the sciences course in English. This would enable me to complete my education in sciences and improve my English, and I think that preparing as early as high school is key in success.
Yours Faithfully,"
Merci d'avance !
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Modifié par lucile83 le 25-01-2013 12:27
Réponse: Correction/ cover letter de gerondif, postée le 31-01-2013 à 23:57:22 (S | E)
Bonsoir,
Cela me paraît bien!
"Dear Madam, Dear Sir,
I would like to apply for (admission to) the science course in English.
As I feel an instant connection with animals, I have known from a very early age that I wanted to work closely with them.
Admission to veterinary colleges is very competitive and I think that the more I prepare for admission, the better my chances will be of getting in.
English is an important skill because veterinary studies now include a compulsory work placement abroad.
So I would be very grateful if you would agree to let me enrol on the sciences course in English. This would enable me to complete my education in sciences and improve my English, and I think that preparing as early as high school is a key to success.
Yours Faithfully,"
Réponse: Correction/ cover letter de patisserie87, postée le 01-02-2013 à 12:40:12 (S | E)
Merci beaucoup, je pense qu'avec une belle lettre bien corrigée, ma cousine aura toutes ses chances !
Merci encore !
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