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Message de fawod posté le 12-10-2016 à 19:03:30 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à tous !
Je suis actuellement étudiant et je vais devoir effectuer un stage à l'étranger. J'ai donc commencé à rédiger ma lettre de motivation, mais je pense avoir fait quelques fautes et j'aimerais bien avoir votre avis avant de l'envoyer. Voici ma lettre :
"I’m currently a French student in management at the University of XXX (France) and I’m studying various contents like marketing, accounting and management. I would like to apply for an internship in your company from mid-April for a minimum period of 3 months. Your company interests me and a lot of person told me that you take trainees.
I’m aware that an internship requires a lot of work and investment, but I’m a dynamic and determinate person, I always do my best on the project which are given to me. I previously held a summer job in a camping. While there, I used to host tourist and present them the region and activities they can do. I also had to maintain the booking calendar. Then, I did an internship for my studies in an accounting firm, I worked with collaborators and studied customer files. I also did some general accounting like balance transaction. Thanks to these experiences, I gained a lot of knowledge that I can apply during an internship in your company.
Your company interests me because I really like what you do and I’m sure that an internship in your company would suit me perfectly. In a near future, I would like to work in tourism and I think that working with you can be benefit for me."
Je vous remercie d'avance pour vos suggestions de correction.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 12-10-2016 21:35
Message de fawod posté le 12-10-2016 à 19:03:30 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à tous !
Je suis actuellement étudiant et je vais devoir effectuer un stage à l'étranger. J'ai donc commencé à rédiger ma lettre de motivation, mais je pense avoir fait quelques fautes et j'aimerais bien avoir votre avis avant de l'envoyer. Voici ma lettre :
"I’m currently a French student in management at the University of XXX (France) and I’m studying various contents like marketing, accounting and management. I would like to apply for an internship in your company from mid-April for a minimum period of 3 months. Your company interests me and a lot of person told me that you take trainees.
I’m aware that an internship requires a lot of work and investment, but I’m a dynamic and determinate person, I always do my best on the project which are given to me. I previously held a summer job in a camping. While there, I used to host tourist and present them the region and activities they can do. I also had to maintain the booking calendar. Then, I did an internship for my studies in an accounting firm, I worked with collaborators and studied customer files. I also did some general accounting like balance transaction. Thanks to these experiences, I gained a lot of knowledge that I can apply during an internship in your company.
Your company interests me because I really like what you do and I’m sure that an internship in your company would suit me perfectly. In a near future, I would like to work in tourism and I think that working with you can be benefit for me."
Je vous remercie d'avance pour vos suggestions de correction.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 12-10-2016 21:35
Réponse : Correction/ Cover Letter de bluestar, postée le 13-10-2016 à 13:54:45 (S | E)
Bonjour..,.
I’m currently a French student in management at the University of XXX (France) and I’m studying various contents ('subjects' est mieux) like marketing, accounting and management. I would like to apply for an internship in your company from mid-April for a minimum period of 3 months. Your company interests me and a lot of person (pluriel - ou 'people')told me that you take trainees.
I’m aware that an internship requires a lot of work and investment, but I’m a dynamic and determinate person, I always do my best on the project which are given to me (project est singulier; 'are' la forme plurielle). I previously held a summer job in a camping (manque le nom). While there, I used to host tourist(pluriel) and present show them the region and activities they can do. I also had to maintain the booking calendar. Then, I did an internship for my studies in an accounting firm, I worked with collaborators and studied customer files. I also did some general accounting like balance transaction. Thanks to these experiences, I gained a lot of knowledge that I can apply during an internship in your company.
Your company interests me because I really like what you do and I’m sure that an internship in your company would suit me perfectly. In a near future, I would like to work in tourism and I think that working with you can be benefit(l'adjectif pas le nom) for me."
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