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Correction/Party
Message from comenow posted on 25-03-2020 at 13:45:55
Hello,
Please correct this text (It is my English homework)
Thank you in advance!

The more the Democratic Party make boast of their "Protect Social Security and Medicare", the more they make us depend on them politically, because if we depend on their "Protect Social Security and Medicare" (if we want to have it), we will have to vote for them.

The Democratic Party makes people be more "lazy", and lack motivation and enthusiasm to study/to work. People don't want to work/ to study hard. They don't want to try hard to study/to work, because they totally rely on Democratic Party - who will "offers" them "money" (allowance/ pension/ social welfare, etc, etc, etc). So, the Democratic Party destroys the competition in works and in studies of people in the society

Remember that,
-Competition is very necessary and important for Growth and Development of a nation/a society
-Jobs - (People get more motivated to work/to study), are an important route to poverty reduction.
So, the Democratic Party is destroying the USA with their "Protect Social Security and Medicare", --->The Democratic Party = the Destroyer of US society

Moreover, the "money" the Democratic Party "gives" us is not their money, but just the money they steal from the other people who work hard, day and night, in the society. Because the "Protect Social Security and Medicare" = Rising Taxes. The Democratic Party must rise taxes - by stealing money from other people who work hard - in order to maintain their "Protect Social Security and Medicare"

So all those who work hard must "nourish" all those who don't want to work hard, and are not motivated in their works/ their studies/ their jobs, but just want to "steal" money from others

CONCLUSION:
the DEMOCRATIC PARTY = SOCIALISM = COMMUNISM

We love these quotes so much (from Churchill, Reagan, Thatcher, and Trump):
1/ “Socialism is the philosophy of failure, the creed of ignorance,and the gospel of envy.” -Winston Churchill
2 / “Socialism only works in two places: Heaven where they don't need it and hell where they already have it.” ― Ronald Reagan
3/ “The problem with socialism is that you eventually run out of other people's money.” ― Margaret Thatcher
4/ From the Soviet Union to Cuba to Venezuela, wherever true socialism or communism has been adopted, it has delivered anguish and devastation and failure. -Donald Trump


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Edited by lucile83 on 26-03-2020 11:24
We could accept a homework but we don't accept political comments.



Re: Correction/Party by gerondif, posted on 25-03-2020 at 17:41:55
Hello
Is it part of your homework to write from a Republican point of view pushed to the extreme ? Your assumptions about the democrats are rather severe. You are one step away from shooting them ! Well, since some governors want Americans to go back to work and leave the over-seventies to die if that allows them to save the economy, anything can happen. But your homework does sound like a political leaflet .

Mistakes in blue.

The more the Democratic Party make boasts of their "Protect Social Security and Medicare", the more they make us depend on them politically, because if we depend on their "Protect Social Security and Medicare" (if we want to have it), we will have to vote for them.

The Democratic Party makes people be more "lazy" (lazier), and lack motivation and enthusiasm to study/to work. People don't want to work/ to study hard. They don't want to try hard to study/to work, because they totally rely on Democratic Party - who will "offers" them "money" (allowance/ pension/ social welfare, etc, etc, etc). So, the Democratic Party destroys the competition in works and in studies of people( meaning ??) in the society

Remember that,
-Competition is very necessary and important for Growth and Development of a nation/a society
-Jobs - (People get more motivated to work/to study), are an important route to poverty reduction.
So, the Democratic Party is destroying the USA with their "Protect Social Security and Medicare", --->The Democratic Party = the Destroyer of US society

Moreover, the "money" the Democratic Party "gives" us is not their money, but just the money they steal from the other people who work hard, day and night, in the society. Because the "Protect Social Security and Medicare" = Rising Taxes. The Democratic Party must rise taxes - by stealing money from other people who work hard - in order to maintain their "Protect Social Security and Medicare"

So all those who work hard must "nourish" all those who don't want to work hard, and are not motivated in their works/ their studies/ their jobs, but just want to "steal" money from others

CONCLUSION:
the DEMOCRATIC PARTY = SOCIALISM = COMMUNISM

We love these quotes so much (from Churchill, Reagan, Thatcher, and Trump):
1/ “Socialism is the philosophy of failure, the creed of ignorance,and the gospel of envy.” -Winston Churchill
2 / “Socialism only works in two places: Heaven where they don't need it and hell where they already have it.” ― Ronald Reagan
3/ “The problem with socialism is that you eventually run out of other people's money.” ― Margaret Thatcher
4/ From the Soviet Union to Cuba to Venezuela, wherever true socialism or communism has been adopted, it has delivered anguish and devastation and failure. -Donald Trump


Re: Correction/Party by comenow, posted on 26-03-2020 at 04:52:47
Hello,
Thank you so much for your correction to my text (my English homework).
That really helps me.
MANY THANKS to you!





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