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Message from zhong posted on 23-07-2009 at 10:57:05
Hello, coud you correct my essay please?
Thank you for your answers.
To be a police has both advantages and disadvantages.
Advantages:
First of all, a police can meet variety people or things. If you are the people who very easy to boring, to be a police would be a good choice to you. Every single day a police shows up, he don’t know what’s going to happen.
Secondly, that is an exciting job also. You will meet lots of challenge in your job experience.
Finally, Police will do good things in the community. They will obtain people’s respect.
Disadvantages:
First of all, that is a dangerous job.
Secondly, you will work long hours. Even some off-duty days, people who know you are police, they would ask you help.
Thirdly, that is a thankless job. To protect people is you duty, so you often put your own safe back of you mind. However, nobody will thank you, because everybody think that is you duty.
Finally, the rising crime rate is another disadvantage to be a police.
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Edited by lucile83 on 23-07-2009 11:11
+ title
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Edited by lucile83 on 26-09-2009 19:20
Message from zhong posted on 23-07-2009 at 10:57:05
Hello, coud you correct my essay please?
Thank you for your answers.
To be a police has both advantages and disadvantages.
Advantages:
First of all, a police can meet variety people or things. If you are the people who very easy to boring, to be a police would be a good choice to you. Every single day a police shows up, he don’t know what’s going to happen.
Secondly, that is an exciting job also. You will meet lots of challenge in your job experience.
Finally, Police will do good things in the community. They will obtain people’s respect.
Disadvantages:
First of all, that is a dangerous job.
Secondly, you will work long hours. Even some off-duty days, people who know you are police, they would ask you help.
Thirdly, that is a thankless job. To protect people is you duty, so you often put your own safe back of you mind. However, nobody will thank you, because everybody think that is you duty.
Finally, the rising crime rate is another disadvantage to be a police.
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Edited by lucile83 on 23-07-2009 11:11
+ title
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Edited by lucile83 on 26-09-2009 19:20
Re: Police/advantages and disadvantages by seb06000, posted on 23-07-2009 at 12:13:50
Hi,
here I put the help you need to correct your essay:
To be a police (voc) has both advantages and disadvantages.
Advantages:
First of all, a police (vocabulary) can meet variety( voc, you need an adjective) people or things. If you are the people( is it a plural?) who( verb?) very easy to boring( verb structure in ING is not correct, you need a passive form), to be a police (voc) would be a good choice to you. Every single day a police shows up( meaning of the verb?), he don’t( auxiliary form is not correct) know what’s going to happen.
Secondly, that is an exciting job also. You will meet lots of challenge ( lots so you forgot the plural mark on the noun) in your job experience.
Finally, Police will do good things in the community. They will obtain people’s respect.
Disadvantages:
First of all, that is a dangerous job.
Secondly, you will work long hours. Even some off-duty days, people who know you are police (voc), they would ask you help.
Thirdly, that is a thankless job. To protect people is you duty, so you often put your own safe( this is the adjective, you need the noun) back of you mind. However, nobody will thank you, because everybody think that is you (you need the possessive pronoun) duty.
Finally, the rising crime rate is another disadvantage to be a ( wrong pronoun)police (voc).
Please ask for any help;
Cheers
sébastien
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Edited by seb06000 on 23-07-2009 12:14
Re: Police/advantages and disadvantages by zhong, posted on 23-07-2009 at 15:56:20
Thank you very much for you help.
Today is the first day i come here.
I am not familiar with this forum yet.
Re: Police/advantages and disadvantages by , posted on 25-07-2009 at 16:33:36
To be a police has both advantages and disadvantages.
Advantages:
First of all, a police man can meet various people or things. If you are the people who easily get bored, to be a police would be a good choice for you. Every single day a police shows up, he don’t know what will happen.
Secondly, that is an exciting job as well. You will meet lots of challenge in your job experience.
Finally, Police will do good things to the community. They will acquire people’s respect.
Disadvantages:
First of all, that is a dangerous job.
Secondly, you will work long hours. Even some off-duty days, people who know you are police, they would ask you for help.
Thirdly, that is a thankless job. To protect people is your duty, so you often put your own safe back of you mind. However, nobody will thank you, because everybody think that is your duty.
Finally, the rising crime rate is another disadvantage of being a policeman.
i am learning english too, so i just try it, not sure my work is right.