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Message de lizie posté le 15-04-2008 à 21:34:17 (S | E | F)
Bonjour;
Je dois écrire un(e) article de presse provenant du SUN.
Le headline que j'ai choisi est: forever in your debt ( l'histoire de départdont sur laquelle je dois prendre exemple est celle que Victoria Beckham qui a eu une gros diamant pour son anniverssaire offert par son mari).
Est-ce que mon histoire va bien? Est -elle cohérente avec mon gros titre?
Et pourriez-vous me dire si mon texte convient ( le langage doit être familier).
Merci beaucoup d'avance
A SURPRISING PRESENT!!
Moby would like to marry Britney Spears!
If the singer Moby has no very good taste in girls, we cannot blame him of credit note of the humor!
He has indeed just declared (on the tone of the joke we hope for it) to the magazine « The Sun » that he would like to get married to the singer in the look more and more trash.
Moby had met Britney Spears in 2003, on the occasion of a collaboration on the album « In the Zone » of the lolita.
Since, he tells to feel more and more attracted by her, as his escapades make the headlines of magazines people. " Britney is as this tragic character of Tennessee William, the more she becomes big and bizarre, the more I love her! ".
MOBY-BRITNEY = TWO SHAVED SKULLS
TWO CRAZY
MOBY would have offered a razor of more than £1000000 to Britney Spears.
This razor being encircled with diamond. Britney thus has to envy nothing in Victoria Beckham which had a diamond for its birthday by her husband
Shocking; but so attracting; it will be fill Britney in the slightest details.
Indeed, the singer it being moved closer to the young lady these time this; he was able to see that in spite of the shaved skull; she still has some work level shirt.
MOBY LIKES CATS BUT HAS SMALL DOSE.
CAN BE IS IT FOR CA THAT HE OFFERED A RAZOR TO BRTINEY.
BRITNEY BEING IN SEARCH OF A MISTER who will know to tame her.
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Modifié par bridg le 15-04-2008 21:46
Message de lizie posté le 15-04-2008 à 21:34:17 (S | E | F)
Bonjour;
Je dois écrire un
Le headline que j'ai choisi est: forever in your debt ( l'histoire de départ
Est-ce que mon histoire va bien? Est -elle cohérente avec mon gros titre?
Et pourriez-vous me dire si mon texte convient ( le langage doit être familier).
Merci beaucoup d'avance
A SURPRISING PRESENT!!
Moby would like to marry Britney Spears!
If the singer Moby has no very good taste in girls, we cannot blame him of credit note of the humor!
He has indeed just declared (on the tone of the joke we hope for it) to the magazine « The Sun » that he would like to get married to the singer in the look more and more trash.
Moby had met Britney Spears in 2003, on the occasion of a collaboration on the album « In the Zone » of the lolita.
Since, he tells to feel more and more attracted by her, as his escapades make the headlines of magazines people. " Britney is as this tragic character of Tennessee William, the more she becomes big and bizarre, the more I love her! ".
MOBY-BRITNEY = TWO SHAVED SKULLS
TWO CRAZY
MOBY would have offered a razor of more than £1000000 to Britney Spears.
This razor being encircled with diamond. Britney thus has to envy nothing in Victoria Beckham which had a diamond for its birthday by her husband
Shocking; but so attracting; it will be fill Britney in the slightest details.
Indeed, the singer it being moved closer to the young lady these time this; he was able to see that in spite of the shaved skull; she still has some work level shirt.
MOBY LIKES CATS BUT HAS SMALL DOSE.
CAN BE IS IT FOR CA THAT HE OFFERED A RAZOR TO BRTINEY.
BRITNEY BEING IN SEARCH OF A MISTER who will know to tame her.
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Modifié par bridg le 15-04-2008 21:46
Réponse: 'The Sun' British press de alili, postée le 16-04-2008 à 07:52:21 (S | E)
Comme vous l'a déjà écrit quelqu'un sur le site "Forum littéraire", il serait bon de ne pas utiliser un logiciel de traduction automatique pour votre premier jet : ça se voit tout de suite...
Réponse: 'The Sun' British press de lizie, postée le 16-04-2008 à 12:23:09 (S | E)
Alors voilà, je l'ai refait ; et ce n'est pas d'un traducteur.
Moby would marry Britney Spears!
If the singer Moby hasn’t a very good taste in girls, we cannot blame him to have humor!
Indeed, Moby has developed an unlikely crush on Britney Spears, the Sun reports.
He has just declared (on the tone of the joke we hope for it) to the magazine « The Sun » that he would marry the singer in the look more and more trash.
Moby, the hip electronica artist said he’d marry Spears “in a heartbeat.”
Moby had met Britney Spears in 2003, on the occasion of a collaboration on the album « In the Zone » of the lolita.
Since, he says that he feels more and more attracted by her, as his escapades make the headlines of magazines people. “She’s like this Tennessee Williams tragic figure,” Moby said, according to the Sun. “The fatter she gets, the weirder she gets, the more I love her.
I found her moderately appealing in the late ’90s, but now I would marry her in a heartbeat.”
MOBY-BRITNEY = TWO SHAVED SKULLS
TWO CRAZY
MOBY would have offered a razor of more than £1000000 to Britney Spears.
This razor is encircled of diamond. Britney hasn’t to envy nothing in Victoria Beckham which had a diamond for its birthday by her husband
Shocking; but so attracting; it will be fill Britney in the slightest details.
Indeed, the singer is more close to the young lady these time this; he was able to see that in spite of the shaved skull; she still has some work to the shirt.
MOBY LIKES CATS BUT a little.
May be it is for that, that he had OFFERED A RAZOR TO BRTINEY.
BRITNEY is a kind of pets who would like be tame.
Merci
J'espère que vous pourrez m'aider.
Réponse: 'The Sun' British press de lizie, postée le 17-04-2008 à 13:43:51 (S | E)
Moby wants to marry Britney Spears!
If the singer Moby hasn’t a very good taste in girls, we cannot blame him to be funny!
Indeed, Moby has developed an unlikely crush on Britney Spears, the Sun reports.
He has just declared (With a tone of joke; we hope) to the magazine « The Sun » that he would marry the singer who has a look which is more and more trash. Moby, the hip electronica artist said he’d marry Spears “in a heartbeat.”
Moby had met Britney Spears in 2003, During his collaboration on the album « In the Zone » of Britney Spears.
Since, he says that he feels more and more attracted her, as his escapades make the headlines of magazines people. “She’s like this Tennessee Williams tragic figure,” Moby said, according to the Sun. “The fatter she gets, the weirder she gets, the more I love her.
I found her moderately appealing in the late ’90s, but now I would marry her in a heartbeat.”
MOBY-BRITNEY = TWO SHAVED SKULLS
TWO MAD MEN
MOBY would have offered a razor of more than £1000000 to Britney Spears.
This razor has a lot of diamond. Britney does not need to be jealous of Victoria Beckham; because she had a diamond for her birthday by her husband
Shocking; but so cute; it will Satisfy Britney in the slightest details.
Indeed, the singer is more close to the young lady At the moment; he was able to see that in spite of the shaved skull; she still has a lot of job about her removal of hair of the shirt.
MOBY LIKES CATS BUT a little.
May be it is for that, that he had OFFERED A RAZOR TO BRTINEY.
BRITNEY is a kind of pets who would like be tame.
Réponse: 'The Sun' British press de stephenh, postée le 18-04-2008 à 17:23:19 (S | E)
C'est une tache pénible!!!
D'abord le Sun utilise beaucoup d'argot, langue familiale, jeux de mots double entendre et a une style rigolo.
donc pour deux personnes avec tête rasé essayez "Slapheads"
Comme titre "Moby Slapheads Britney" pas correcte grammaticalement mais c'est le Sun après tout!
Cette histoire s'agit-il de Victoria Beckham ou Britney Spears?
Le Sun utilise des phrases courts et les mots d'un ou deux syllabes.
Utilise le termes en ce qui concerne le rasoir et les cheveux
Close shave = l'échapper belle
to miss something by a hairs breadth = quelque chose presque s'est passé
to brush = rencontre
to give someone the brush off = envoyer quelqu'un
to brush up = refraîchir
Slapper = une femme sans morales
Slap and tickle = se peloter
slap bang (in the middle) = en plein (centre)
slap happy = insouciant
slap up meal = un repas gourmand
At a slap up meal in the excusive Havana Club Moby brushed up his relationship with Britney by giving her a diamond razor, the slap happy couple first brushed together in 2003, slap bang in the middle of recording Moby's album "In The Zone".
Bon courage
Réponse: 'The Sun' British press de lizie, postée le 18-04-2008 à 20:58:57 (S | E)
Je vous remercie.
C'est jsutement ça qu'il me fallait
encore MERCI
Réponse: 'The Sun' British press de lizie, postée le 18-04-2008 à 21:03:55 (S | E)
En faite, je dois écrire un article du SUN à partir du headlines suivant:
forever in my debt:: et dans mon livre, ce headline correspond à victoria bechkam qui a offert un diamant à sa femme pour so nanniversaire; il faut donc que je reste dans ce théme ; c'est pourquoi j'ai fait une référence à victoria ; et que je parle que moby offre un rasoir diamanté à britney spears; c'est bisard; et couteux.
Es-ce bien??
Merci
Réponse: 'The Sun' British press de lizie, postée le 18-04-2008 à 21:20:33 (S | E)
Est- ce que maintenant mon texte convient mieux pour un article du SUN??!!
Moby wants to marry Britney Spears!
If the singer Moby hasn’t a very good taste in girls, we cannot blame him!
Indeed, Moby has developed an unlikely crush on Britney Spears, the Sun reports.
He has just declared (with his usual sense of humour,we hope) to the magazine « The Sun » that he would marry the singer, who has a look which is more and more trash. Moby, the hip electronica artist said he’d marry Spears “in a heartbeat.”
Moby had met Britney Spears in 2003, during his collaboration on the album « In the Zone » of Britney Spears.
Since then, he says that he feels more and more attracted her, as her escapades make the headlines of magazines people.
“She’s like this Tennessee Williams tragic figure,” Moby said, according to the Sun. “The fatter she gets, the weirder she gets, the more I love her.
I found her moderately appealing in the late ’90s, but now I would marry her in a heartbeat.”
MOBY-BRITNEY = TWO SHAVED SKULLS
Slapheads
At a slap up meal in the excusive Havana Club Moby brushed up his relationship with Britney by giving her a diamond razor, the slap happy couple first brushed together in 2003, slap bang in the middle of recording Moby's album "In The Zone".
Indeed,MOBY is said to have offered a razor of more than £1 000 000 to Britney Spears.
This razor has a lot of diamonds. Britney does not need to be jealous of Victoria Beckham; she only had one diamond for her birthday from her husband
Shocking, but so cute; it will Satisfy Britney's dearest wish.
Indeed, the singer is closer to the young lady at the moment; he was able to see that in spite of the shaved skull, she hasn't a good epilation in her nether regions.
MOBY LIKES CATS BUT in small quantities.
Maybe it is for that, that he had OFFERED A RAZOR TO her .
BRITNEY is a kind of pet who would like be tamed.
Merci Beaucoupppppppppppp thks
Réponse: 'The Sun' British press de stephenh, postée le 19-04-2008 à 11:56:59 (S | E)
Bonjour
Si l'article est sur Victoria Beckham puis ce n'est pas l'article vous avez écrit qui est sur Moby et Britney.
Si vous récrivez cet article n'oubliez pas Victoria Beckham et toujours "Posh Spice" ou "Posh", David Beckham est toujours "Becks" donc le couple sont toujours "Posh and Becks" et leur maison est "Beckingham Palace".
Réponse: 'The Sun' British press de lizie, postée le 19-04-2008 à 14:50:49 (S | E)
Donc là mon artcile n'est pas bon avec le headline: " forever in your debt"??!!
Merci d'avance pour votre réponse
Réponse: 'The Sun' British press de stephenh, postée le 19-04-2008 à 16:21:37 (S | E)
Bonjour,
alors ce n'est pas pour moi à dire mais vous avez dit que l'article est sur le sujet de Victoria Beckham et son anniversaire et le cadeau elle a reçu.
Dans votre article ces sujets méritent 12 mots et Moby et Britney mérite 150 (environ). Donc qu'est que vous pensez?
Réponse: 'The Sun' British press de lizie, postée le 20-04-2008 à 20:49:12 (S | E)
Oui mais le headline: "forever in your debt" convient-il au sujet qur Britney et Moby??
Merci
Réponse: 'The Sun' British press de stephenh, postée le 20-04-2008 à 21:18:55 (S | E)
Bonjour,
Pour moi oui, mais il n'accorde pas avec ce que vous avez dit ça c'est tout.
Réponse: 'The Sun' British press de lizie, postée le 21-04-2008 à 14:47:32 (S | E)
OKAY thks
mais en faite; c'était un example de sujet sur lequel nous pouvions parler; prendre modèle sur Victoria et David Backhem pour écrire mon article.
FOREVER IN YOUR DEBT
Moby wants to marry Britney Spears!
If the singer Moby hasn’t a very good taste in girls, we cannot blame him!
Indeed, Moby has developed an unlikely crush on Britney Spears, the Sun reports.
He has just declared (with his usual sense of humour,we hope) to the magazine « The Sun » that he would marry the singer, who has a look which is more and more trash. Moby, the hip electronica artist said he’d marry Spears “in a heartbeat.”
Moby had met Britney Spears in 2003, during his collaboration on the album « In the Zone » of Britney Spears.
Since then, he says that he feels more and more attracted her, as her escapades make the headlines of magazines people.
“She’s like this Tennessee Williams tragic figure,” Moby said, according to the Sun. “The fatter she gets, the weirder she gets, the more I love her.
I found her moderately appealing in the late ’90s, but now I would marry her in a heartbeat.”
MOBY-BRITNEY = TWO SHAVED SKULLS
Slapheads
At a slap up meal in the excusive Havana Club Moby brushed up his relationship with Britney by giving her a diamond razor, the slap happy couple first brushed together in 2003, slap bang in the middle of recording Moby's album "In The Zone".
Indeed,MOBY is said to have offered a razor of more than £1 000 000 to Britney Spears.
This razor has a lot of diamonds. Britney does not need to be jealous of Victoria Beckham; she only had one diamond for her birthday from her husband
Shocking, but so cute; it will Satisfy Britney's dearest wish.
Indeed, the singer is closer to the young lady at the moment; he was able to see that in spite of the shaved skull, she hasn't a good epilation in her nether regions.
MOBY LIKES CATS BUT in small quantities.
Maybe it is for that, that he had OFFERED A RAZOR TO her .
BRITNEY is a kind of pet who would like be tamed.
Vous trouvez que c'est bon comme ça??
EST-ce un bon article?
Je vous ferais voir mon montage que j'ai fais
Merciiiiiiiiii
Réponse: 'The Sun' British press de stephenh, postée le 22-04-2008 à 22:58:04 (S | E)
Bonjour Lizie,
D'abord vous avez l'idée de cet article mieux maintenant. Le niveau d'anglais est bon et le grammaire est bon.
Pour le faire mieux, vous vous demandez des questions
La formule pour n'importe quelle rédaction est:
L'introduction
Le développement
La conclusion.
Votre article suit cette formule?
Quels sont les thèmes de l'article?
Les thèmes, est-ce qu'ils coulent l'un à l'autre?
Il y a des sujets qui sont en l'air sans liaison avec l'un ou l'autre des thèmes? (c'est un histoire de Moby et Britany et soudainement Victoria Beckham est là, pourquoi?)
Finalement et le plus important votre article, réponde-t-il à la tâche donné.
Pensez du vocabulaire:
1) avez-vous fait une traduction littérale? ("To offer a gift" est un exemple)
2) Y a-t-il un tournure mieux que ceux ce que vous avez utilisé ("The razor had a lot of diamonds")
Diamonds sont "sparklers" ou "a girls best friend"
Victoria Beckham est toujours "Posh Spice" ou "Posh"
£1 000 000 est écrit £1 million (les lecteurs du Sun peut seulement compter à dix pas plus! Ha Ha)
looks a million = looks stunning
Réponse: 'The Sun' British press de lizie, postée le 23-04-2008 à 16:44:49 (S | E)
Hello:
J'ai tenu compte de vos remarques ; voici le résultat
la présentation n'est pas comme celle que j'aurais pu vous la montrer; mais ce forum ne le permet pas)Thks
FOREVER IN YOUR DEBT
Moby wants to marry Britney Spears!
If the singer Moby hasn’t a very good taste in girls, we cannot blame him!
Indeed, Moby has developed an unlikely crush on Britney Spears, the Sun reports.
He has just declared (with his usual sense of humour,we hope) to the magazine « The Sun » that he would marry the singer, who has a look which is more and more trash.
Moby, the hip electronica artist said he’d marry Spears “in a heartbeat.”
Moby had met Britney Spears in 2003, during his collaboration on the album « In the Zone » of Britney Spears.
Since then, he says that he feels more and more attracted her, as her escapades make the headlines of magazines people.
“She’s like this Tennessee Williams tragic figure,” Moby said, according to the Sun.
“The fatter she gets, the weirder she gets, the more I love her.
I found her moderately appealing in the late ’90s, but now I would marry her in a heartbeat.”
MOBY-BRITNEY = TWO SHAVED SKULLS
Slapheads
At a slap up meal in the excusive Havana Club Moby brushed up his relationship with Britney by giving her a sparklers razor, the slap happy couple first brushed together in 2003, slap bang in the middle of recording Moby's album "In The Zone".
Indeed,MOBY is said to have offered a gift of more than £1 million to Britney Spears.
A razor which is diamondtipped.
So, Britney does not need to be jealous of Posh Spice ; she only had one a girls best friend for her birthday from her husband.
Everybody spoke about this present; but now, Moby had beaten well David with this one.
Indeed, it is shocking, but so cute; it will Satisfy Britney's dearest wish.
Indeed, the singer is closer to the young lady at the moment; he was able to see that in spite of the shaved skull, she hasn't a good epilation in her nether regions.
MOBY LIKES CATS BUT in small quantities.
Maybe it is for that, that he had OFFERED A RAZOR TO her.
BRITNEY is a kind of pet who would like be tamed.
Réponse: 'The Sun' British press de stephenh, postée le 23-04-2008 à 21:32:10 (S | E)
Bonjour Lizie,
Presque là,
Le titre: The Sun souvent utilise un jeu de mots dans le gros titre, il y en a beaucoup pour "Head"
"a sparklers razor" ne marche pas parce que vous avez utilisé sparklers comme un adjectif "diamond encrusted razor" est le phrase vous cherchez.
Trop de "Indeed"
"to Offer" n'est pas offrir en ce sens.
"a gift" - article indéfini - il a offert un autre cadeau?
"A razor which is diamond tipped" c'est une répétition donc effacez
c'est "one of a girl's best friends"
"from her husband" est trop, elle reçoit un diamond de qui autre?
"had beaten well David" il faut le faire à l'inverse "has Becks well beaten"
"epilation" a 3 syllabes donc trop long pour les lecteurs du Sun
les chats apparaissent de n'importe où, quelle est la liaison entre les chats et Britney - peut-être c'est une traduction littérale? en cas il n'y a jamais de traduction littérale d'argot.
Réponse: 'The Sun' British press de lizie, postée le 24-04-2008 à 14:50:24 (S | E)
Bonjour:
Merci ENCORE and again pour votre AIDE
(j'ai fait des retouches; c'est suffisant??)
Thks
FOREVER IN YOUR DEBT
Moby wants to marry Britney Spears! or Moby says that he has the hots for the trainwreck version of Britney Spears. or Britney Spears: 'Fat, weird' and perfect wife for Moby
If the singer Moby hasn’t a very good taste in girls, we cannot blame him!
Indeed, Moby has developed an unlikely crush on Britney Spears, the Sun reports.
He has just declared (with his usual sense of humour,we hope) to the magazine « The Sun » that he would marry the singer, who has a look which is more and more trash.
Moby, the hip electronica artist said he’d marry Spears “in a heartbeat.”
Moby had met Britney Spears in 2003, during his collaboration on the album « In the Zone » of Britney Spears.
Since then, he says that he feels more and more attracted her, as her escapades make the headlines of magazines people.
“She’s like this Tennessee Williams tragic figure,” Moby said, according to the Sun.
“The fatter she gets, the weirder she gets, the more I love her.
I found her moderately appealing in the late ’90s, but now I would marry her in a heartbeat.”
MOBY-BRITNEY = TWO SHAVED SKULLS
Slapheads
At a slap up meal in the excusive Havana Club Moby brushed up his relationship with Britney by giving her a diamond encrusted razor , the slap happy couple first brushed together in 2003, slap bang in the middle of recording Moby's album "In The Zone".
MOBY is said to have gave a gift of more than £1 million to Britney Spears.
One of a girl's best friends .
So, Britney does not need to be jealous of Posh Spice ; she only had one a girls best friend for her birthday.
Everybody spoke about this present; but now, Moby has Becks well beaten with this one.
Indeed, it is shocking, but so cute; it will Satisfy Britney's dearest wish.
The singer is closer to the young lady at the moment; he was able to see that in spite of the shaved skull, she hasn't a good epil in her nether regions.
He had gave A RAZOR TO her; because it is well known that MOBY LIKES CATS in small quantities.
BRITNEY is a kind of pet who would like be tamed.
Réponse: 'The Sun' British press de stephenh, postée le 25-04-2008 à 19:24:55 (S | E)
Bonjour,
Bonne anniversaire pour hier.
To give est bien mais "gave" est le prétérit (mal de temps x2).
Vous avez "One of a girl's best friends" comme un phrase mais pas de verbe? Vous avez utilisé ce petit phrase après mais vous ne l'avez pas corrigé.
Epil n'est pas court pour epilation, une jolie idée mais ça ne marche pas
Je ne suis pas sûr mais je pense qu'il y a un jeu de mot avec chat et animaux domestiques. Ca marche en français mais on ne peut jamais faire une traduction direct à anglais. Une bonne idée mais il faut penser de jeu de mots en anglais (pas français).
C'est un grand boulot n'est pas, qu'est -ce que vous avez appris?
Réponse: 'The Sun' British press de lizie, postée le 26-04-2008 à 20:28:42 (S | E)
Bonjour:
Merci beaucoup pour mon anniversaire, c'est très gentil..!!!
Voici ENCORE mon nouvel article; mais je ne suis pas arrivé à corriger beaucoup de mes erreures; c'est un travail très difficile...:s
FOREVER IN YOUR DEBT
Moby wants to marry Britney Spears! or Moby says that he has the hots for the trainwreck version of Britney Spears. or Britney Spears: 'Fat, weird' and perfect wife for Moby
If the singer Moby hasn’t a very good taste in girls, we cannot blame him!
Indeed, Moby has developed an unlikely crush on Britney Spears, the Sun reports.
He has just declared (with his usual sense of humour,we hope) to the magazine « The Sun » that he would marry the singer, who has a look which is more and more trash.
Moby, the hip electronica artist said he’d marry Spears “in a heartbeat.”
Moby had met Britney Spears in 2003, during his collaboration on the album « In the Zone » of Britney Spears.
Since then, he says that he feels more and more attracted her, as her escapades make the headlines of magazines people.
“She’s like this Tennessee Williams tragic figure,” Moby said, according to the Sun.
“The fatter she gets, the weirder she gets, the more I love her.
I found her moderately appealing in the late ’90s, but now I would marry her in a heartbeat.”
MOBY-BRITNEY = TWO SHAVED SKULLS
Slapheads
At a slap up meal in the excusive Havana Club Moby brushed up his relationship with Britney by giving her a diamond encrusted razor , the slap happy couple first brushed together in 2003, slap bang in the middle of recording Moby's album "In The Zone".
MOBY is said that he gave a gift of more than £1 million to Britney Spears.
A razor diamondtipped which is One of a girl's best friends .
So, Britney does not need to be jealous of Posh Spice ; she only had one a girls best friend for her birthday.
Everybody spoke about this present; but now, Moby has Becks well beaten with this one.
Indeed, it is shocking, but so cute; it will Satisfy Britney's dearest wish.
The singer is closer to the young lady at the moment; he was able to see that in spite of the shaved skull, she hasn't a good epil in her nether regions.
He had gave A RAZOR TO her; because it is well known that MOBY LIKES CATS in small quantities.
BRITNEY is a kind of pet who would like be tamed.
Ps: pourriez-vous m’aider; je ne trouve pa dans le dictionnaire: épilation en plus court :s
De plus, je ne trouve pas de « Pun » pour le mot chat et l’animal domestique !!
Je vais peut être paraitre « embétante » ; mais pourriez vous me donner again un coup de pouce ?!!
Thks very MUCH
Réponse: 'The Sun' British press de stephenh, postée le 27-04-2008 à 06:53:48 (S | E)
Bonjour Lizie,
D'abord ce version n'est pas la dernière, donc vous avez perdu les améliorations!
Vous êtes fatiguez de ce tâche?
Je sais c'est tellement difficile, et vous y êtes arrivé très bien il serait un vrai dommage de ne le finir pas.
à boulot
reculez à la dernière version
"Moby is said to have gave" to have est bon mais gave est mal de temps
"He had gave a razor to her" même faute
Vous avez "One of a girl's best friends" comme une phrase mais pas de verbe, faites-la bien ou effacez-la!
Vous avez utilisé cette petite phrase dans la prochaine phrase mais vous ne l'avez pas corrigé.
Peut-être en place de "she hasn't a good epilation" mettez un phrase plus simple "she isn't as well shaved"
Vous ne peut pas trouver un "Pun" pour chat ("nether regions")et animaux domestique car il n'existe pas en anglais. Sans récrire les dernières deux phrases il n'y rien on peut faire.
Si vous laissez ces dernières deux phrases, puis regardez-les de point de vu anglais - soudainement ces chats sont là sans raison. Il n'y a pas une liaison entre le chat et le rasoir en anglais.
Comme une idée si vous doutez le solidité de leur relations on pourrait dire plutôt que "here today gone tomorrow" la phrase "hair today gone tomorrow" Bien sûr on aurait besoin de écrire un petit quelque chose plus mais je pense ça marcherait bien.
Bon courage
Réponse: 'The Sun' British press de lizie, postée le 28-04-2008 à 19:36:35 (S | E)
Bonjour;
Je voulais tout d'abord vous remercier pour toute l'aide que vous m'apporter;tout le temps que vous consacrez à m'aider.
Je l'ai ENCORE refait ^^ sans votre aide; je n'y serais surment pas arrivé.
Merci
thks
FOREVER IN YOUR DEBT
Moby wants to marry Britney Spears! or Moby says that he has the hots for the trainwreck version of Britney Spears. or Britney Spears: 'Fat, weird' and perfect wife for Moby
If the singer Moby hasn’t a very good taste in girls, we cannot blame him!
Indeed, Moby has developed an unlikely crush on Britney Spears, the Sun reports.
He has just declared (with his usual sense of humour,we hope) to the magazine « The Sun » that he would marry the singer, who has a look which is more and more trash.
Moby, the hip electronica artist said he’d marry Spears “in a heartbeat.”
Moby had met Britney Spears in 2003, during his collaboration on the album « In the Zone » of Britney Spears.
Since then, he says that he feels more and more attracted her, as her escapades make the headlines of magazines people.
“She’s like this Tennessee Williams tragic figure,” Moby said, according to the Sun.
“The fatter she gets, the weirder she gets, the more I love her.
I found her moderately appealing in the late ’90s, but now I would marry her in a heartbeat.”
MOBY-BRITNEY = TWO SHAVED SKULLS
Slapheads
At a slap up meal in the excusive Havana Club Moby brushed up his relationship with Britney by giving her a diamond encrusted razor , the slap happy couple first brushed together in 2003, slap bang in the middle of recording Moby's album "In The Zone".
MOBY is said to have given a gift of more than £1 million to Britney Spears.
It is one of a girl's best friends .
So, Britney does not need to be jealous of Posh Spice ; she only had sparklers for her birthday.
Everybody spoke about this present; but now, Moby has Becks well beaten with this one.
Indeed, it is shocking, but so cute; it will Satisfy Britney's dearest wish.
The singer is closer to the young lady at the moment; he was able to see that in spite of the shaved skull, she isn't as well shaved .
here today gone tomorrow
Réponse: 'The Sun' British press de stephenh, postée le 28-04-2008 à 23:01:31 (S | E)
Bonjour Lizie,
Alors, vous avez mal compris des chose donc j'ai refait votre rédaction comme vous l'avez eu deux versions auparavant avec les corrections vous avez fait après.
MOBY-BRITNEY
Slapheads together
At a slap up meal in the excusive Havana Club Moby brushed up his relationship with Britney by giving her a diamond encrusted razor , the slap happy couple first brushed together in 2003, slap bang in the middle of recording Moby's album "In The Zone".
MOBY is said to have given a gift of more than £1 million to Britney Spears.
So, Britney does not need to be jealous of Posh Spice ; she only had one of a girls best friend for her birthday.
Everybody spoke about this present; but now, Moby has Becks well beaten with this one.
Indeed, it is shocking, but so cute; it will Satisfy Britney's dearest wish.
The singer is closer to the young lady at the moment; he was able to see that in spite of the shaved skull, she isn't well shaved in her nether regions.
ça va comme ça
Pour finir vous n'avez pas compris le blague j'ai suggéré:
"Here today gone tomorrow"
"il est ici aujourd'hui, il s'en sera allé demain" veut dire quelque chose ephémère donc il arrive aujourd'hui mais il ne dure pas.
donc si on doute la solidité de l'amour entre Moby et Britney peut-être leur amour arrive aujourd'hui et demain il s'en sera allé. En autres mots Moby,il a le béguin pour Britney, un amour qui ne dure pas ou est-ce qu'il a un amour plus profond pour elle?
Les mots "here" et "hair", leurs sons sont presque pareil donc
"Hair today gone tomorrow" veut dire - Poilu aujourd'hui, rasez demain donc Britney a utilisé son cadeau!
maintenant c'est pour vous a écrire 2 phrases pour la finir.
Réponse: 'The Sun' British press de lizie, postée le 30-04-2008 à 14:38:01 (S | E)
Bonjour;
et le début vous ne l'avez pas réecrit; c'est qu'il est bon?
Merci beaucoup pour toute l'aide que vous m'avez apporté; et le temps que vous m'avez consacré.
Toutefois, je ne comprend pas pourquoi il faut écrire deux phrase apres?
Puisque le jeu de mots que vous avez suggéré la fait non??
Pouvez-vous m'expliquer ENCORE une fois s'il vous plait?
Thks
Réponse: 'The Sun' British press de stephenh, postée le 30-04-2008 à 20:00:22 (S | E)
Bonjour Lizie,
C'est un plaisir à vous aider.
Si vous écrire des autre chose c'est pour vous mais en ce moment, pour moi, vous avez une introduction et un développement mais pas de conclusion (regardez mon commentaire le 22 avril).
Auparavant vous avez une jolie conclusion qui marche en français mais pas en anglais. Il faut remplacer cette conclusion pour mettre la rédaction au point.
Le blague que j'ai suggéré marche car le son de "Hair" et de "Here" sont très proche (si vous n'est pas accord, croyez-moi c'est vrai)et c'est le genre de blague que le Sun utiliserait.
Si on parle de la solidité de leur amour comme peut-être peu durable on peut dire:
Ce cadeau est-ce qu'il fait une signe que Moby est vraiment passionné de Bitney ou est-ce que un cas de Hair today and gone tomorrow.
something is "Here today gone tomorrow" - veut dire quelque chose ça va, ça vient. (une phrase très bien connu en anglais).
Si Britney utilisera le rasoir les poils sont là aujourd'hui donc "the hair is here today" mais demain après elle se sera rasée, les poils seront allés "the hair will have gone tomorrow" donc on peut utiliser le phrase comme un blague "Hair today, gone tomorrow" comme les poils ne dure pas un longtemps en face d'un rasoir.
c'est claire comme boue ou non?
Réponse: 'The Sun' British press de linkinparker27, postée le 01-05-2008 à 00:49:59 (S | E)
very good 10/10
Réponse: 'The Sun' British press de lizie, postée le 01-05-2008 à 10:08:58 (S | E)
Bonjour;
a d'accord, je n'avez pas bien saisilesens de votre phrase; mais maintenant c'est fait :d
Merci ENCORE
FOREVER IN YOUR DEBT
Moby wants to marry Britney Spears! or Moby says that he has the hots for the trainwreck version of Britney Spears. or Britney Spears: 'Fat, weird' and perfect wife for Moby
If the singer Moby hasn’t a very good taste in girls, we cannot blame him!
Indeed, Moby has developed an unlikely crush on Britney Spears, the Sun reports.
He has just declared (with his usual sense of humour,we hope) to the magazine « The Sun » that he would marry the singer, who has a look which is more and more trash.
Moby, the hip electronica artist said he’d marry Spears “in a heartbeat.”
Moby had met Britney Spears in 2003, during his collaboration on the album « In the Zone » of Britney Spears.
Since then, he says that he feels more and more attracted her, as her escapades make the headlines of magazines people.
“She’s like this Tennessee Williams tragic figure,” Moby said, according to the Sun.
“The fatter she gets, the weirder she gets, the more I love her.
I found her moderately appealing in the late ’90s, but now I would marry her in a heartbeat.”
MOBY-BRITNEY
Slapheads together
At a slap up meal in the excusive Havana Club Moby brushed up his relationship with Britney by giving her a diamond encrusted razor , the slap happy couple first brushed together in 2003, slap bang in the middle of recording Moby's album "In The Zone".
MOBY is said to have given a gift of more than £1 million to Britney Spears.
So, Britney does not need to be jealous of Posh Spice ; she only had one of a girls best friend for her birthday.
Everybody spoke about this present; but now, Moby has Becks well beaten with this one.
Indeed, it is shocking, but so cute; it will Satisfy Britney's dearest wish.
The singer is closer to the young lady at the moment; he was able to see that in spite of the shaved skull, she isn't well shaved in her nether regions.
Thanks to this present; we can ask the question of the solidity of their love.
So, we can thus wonder if this present to Brtiney Spears by Moby, is sign that Moby is really fascinated by Britney or it is a case of Hair today and gone tomorrow.
INDISPENSABLES : 